An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
I find myself disagreeing with the given argument here as I find some contradicting points in the given passages.
The passage says that the international development organization responded to the vitamin A deficiency among the people living in Tagus. Later part of the article says that millet is abundant in that area and also a staple food. If highly vitamin A enriched millet is already a stable food in Tagus, the people living in there shouldn't be suffering from vitamin A deficiency.
Since these "millet" is a stable food in Tagus, The organization didn't need to engineer a new breed of it. And it is also confusing why people of Tagus needed to adopt with the new variety of their food. Clearly, they don't need any new breed of millet which is costly.
In the argument, it says that the farmers will be paid subsidies to cultivate this newly engineered highly vitamin A enriched millet. But, it doesn't say the amount of the subsidies and also the amount of costly millet. The subsidies may not be enough for the poor farmer to cultivate them.
Since we realize that people of Tagus don't need any new breed of millet, it is confusing that there are vitamin A deficiency among them. Besides, the government of Tagus should understand that there is no need to promote new type of millet.
At last I would like to say that, there are some confusing points noticeable in the given passage. It is not clear how people have vitamin deficiency when vitamin enriched food is abundant there. It is also not clear why newly engineered millet is necessary for them. Why should the government promote new millet is also a mystery which cost more. The passage should have mentioned about the amount of the subsidies relative to the cost of new millet. For these reasons, I disagree with the argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 319 350
No. of Characters: 1448 1500
No. of Different Words: 127 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.226 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.539 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.506 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.722 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.432 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.62 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 328, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...od in Tagus, the people living in there shouldnt be suffering from vitamin A deficiency....
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Line 9, column 76, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... stable food in Tagus, The organization didnt need to engineer a new breed of it. And...
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Line 9, column 229, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ew variety of their food. Clearly, they dont need any new breed of millet which is c...
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Line 13, column 143, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ghly vitamin A enriched millet. But, it doesnt say the amount of the subsidies and als...
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Line 17, column 39, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... Since we realize that people of Tagus dont need any new breed of millet, it is con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1517.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 314.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83121019108 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64398157434 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 204.123752495 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.423566878981 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 479.7 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.6447247692 57.8364921388 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.2777777778 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4444444444 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.72222222222 5.70786347227 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438447457596 0.218282227539 201% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143569696415 0.0743258471296 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0880986169548 0.0701772020484 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220183982148 0.128457276422 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104760106292 0.0628817314937 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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