An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Though it could be possible that the problem of deficiency of Vitamin can be solved with the efforts made by the government. But in this argument the author made some unwarranted argument which can be evaluated. One example is that, the author did not mention how much will subsidy is government willing to give. Is it 100%, 50% or 10% we can not tell for sure. Due to the lack of facts and evidences the author's argument seems little far-fetched.
To begin with, the author did not mention whether this newly designed millet goes through the human trials or not. Will it be beneficial to humans or not? Whether it will not lower the deficiency level of the Vitamin A further. What if it causes some harmful side effects. We can not tell anything for sure. This new millet might also works as intended but we cannot tell anything due to lack of relevant facts.
In addition to this, the author fails to mention how much subsidy government is willing to provide, price of the of millet and the economic conditions of the Tagus people. What if, government is providing 50% subsidy and people of Tagu are going through such a economic hardship that even on 50% subsidy they cannot afford millet. As a result of this, even after the measure taken by the government there is no assurance that the Vitamin A deficiency will improve.
Apart from all this, the author also assumes that Tagus people will readily accept this new millet in their daily diet. In this assumption the author fails to mention how similar is this new breed of millet to the regular breed. Is it same in color, texture or taste? What if, because this new millet breed is artificially engineered, it tastes different and people will totally discard it.
The author should have mentioned the similarity between these two millet to make his argument more compelling.
In summary the argument made by the author contains many open ends and can be argued in many ways. And in lack to supporting facts it has no leg to stand for. The argument could be strengthed if the author clearly mentions the relevant facts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...Will it be beneficial to humans or not? Whether it will not lower the deficiency level ...
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...e will readily accept this new millet in their daily diet. In this assumption the...
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...d of millet to the regular breed. Is it same in color, texture or taste? What if, because thi...
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...t to make his argument more compelling. In summary the argument made by the auth...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'so', 'apart from', 'in addition', 'in summary', 'as a result', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.216748768473 0.25644967241 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.162561576355 0.15541462614 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0812807881773 0.0836205057962 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0492610837438 0.0520304965353 95% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0369458128079 0.0272364105082 136% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.115763546798 0.125424944231 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0320197044335 0.0416121511921 77% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.38198094009 2.79052419416 85% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0320197044335 0.026700313972 120% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.110837438424 0.113004496875 98% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0394088669951 0.0255425247493 154% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0197044334975 0.0127820249294 154% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2089.0 2731.13054187 76% => OK
No of words: 366.0 446.07635468 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.70765027322 6.12365571057 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.57801047555 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.333333333333 0.378187486979 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.229508196721 0.287650121315 80% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.131147540984 0.208842608468 63% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.068306010929 0.135150697306 51% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38198094009 2.79052419416 85% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 207.018472906 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478142076503 0.469332199767 102% => OK
Word variations: 50.1132952284 52.1807786196 96% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.039408867 110% => OK
Sentence length: 16.6363636364 23.2022227129 72% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6747992147 57.7814097925 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9545454545 141.986410481 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6363636364 23.2022227129 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.409090909091 0.724660767414 56% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 39.5871833085 51.9672348444 76% => OK
Elegance: 1.46534653465 1.8405768891 80% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366012100928 0.441005458295 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.121410010741 0.135418324435 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0783501682506 0.0829849096947 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.531790957756 0.58762219726 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.169628070287 0.147661913831 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131420554395 0.193483328276 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852463540856 0.0970749176394 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.296785982022 0.42659136922 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0990405342035 0.0774707102158 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221242948916 0.312017818177 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779460897208 0.0698173142475 112% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.87684729064 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 6.46551724138 46% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 5.36822660099 168% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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