An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be p

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An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The people of Tagus, an impoverished nation, has been identified to have vitamin A deficiency. Vitamin A is essential for the body to perform and without it, health risks. In poverty ridden countries, there are tremendous support different international organizations. These organizations help bring healthcare, education, structural infrastructure, and so much more. Base on the need of Tagus, the international development organization has responded by developing a solution to the vitamin A deficiency through millet product. Though with good intentions, the organization's plan may not be the solution for Tagus due to various flaws in their recommendation

There is much uncertainty that lies within the organization itself. How long have they been around and are they reputable? There are so many international organizations that claim that they are helping poor nations, but all the funds to directed back towards their committees. First, we need to look at the history of this particular organization and their accomplishments. There has to proof of other successes where they took the same approach to help with vitamin deficiencies. More research will have to go into researching about the organization and their capabilities before accepting their help.

How will this new millet, potent with vitamin A, be different from other millets? The organization claims that they have developed a millet that will help Tagus overcome their vitamin A deficiency. Though they don't exactly mention the differences between what Tagus citizens are currently consuming versus their product. Does the millet have 100% more vitamin A or 10%? These two percentages are substantially different, but they both can be used to identify that the millet is higher on vitamin A. The organization's use of numbers is extremely vague; without the exact numbers, we don't know for sure if their new millet will be the resolution.

Tagus's farmers are living in an impoverished nation and how much are they currently making? The organization states that farmers will be provided subsidies for purchasing and farmer these new millets, but it does cost more to purchase. We don't exactly know how much these farmers are currently making - if they're just struggling to survive. There's no guarantee that the farmers have enough money to obtain this new millet and if they do, how much are the subsidies? There no disclosure if the reimbursement will equate to how much the farmers spent. Even at that, will Tagus citizens even purchase the new millet? People are often wary of trying new items, especially when it is promoted by the government. There are so many questions that need to be answered before the government can even start promoting this new millet.

Without substantial details and depths of information, there are so many questions that come to mind based on the statement and prediction made by the international development organization. The vague details and proclaim that their new millet will help Tagus is without any base. More research will have to go into the organization itself, their product, and recommendations because it sounds too familiar to empty promises.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, so, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 28.8173652695 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2670.0 2260.96107784 118% => OK
No of words: 503.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30815109344 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04019795456 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477137176938 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 828.0 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4155964288 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3571428571 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9642857143 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.28571428571 5.70786347227 23% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36539293808 0.218282227539 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110593453199 0.0743258471296 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833628434092 0.0701772020484 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214027416172 0.128457276422 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100555470203 0.0628817314937 160% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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