"A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. Currently, the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, the proposed new jazz club in Monroe, the C-Note, would have the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popular in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer; several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe; and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight at 7 P.M. Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment."
The argument states that a new jazz music club developed in monroe be quite succesful in monetary terms stating the reason for it to be the location of proximity to the local market. also the popularity of jazz music there. also the citing thait a typical jazz fan spends some high amount of money on music. The argument as is stands seems fallacious. The argument makes a number of unwarranted claims.
Firstly, The argument claims that the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away which is not a significant distance from the market and easily be commuted within few minutes. Apparently there is no proximity advantage for the current location. thus claim that the market would be all by itself seems dubious.
Secondly, The argument cities that over 1 lakh people attended the monroe's annual jazz festival last summer but this does not imply that similar amount of crowd will attend the future events also the data shown is for the last summer thus it is difficult to infer based on the these data. Furthur despite attending the concert in large amount people do not prefer time in night clubs therefore the attendance in night clubs even during this festival remains low.
Thirdly, several jazz musician that live monroe does not contribute to the fact that jazz music club will be profitable because they might be living monroe because of its other amenities rather than jazz. also this people might not visit the jazz night club. The argument states that jazz Nightly a show that airs on radio is highest rated among other show this may be due to the fact that other programs on radio are below par which makes this highest rated among others
Fourthly, arguments present monetary figures related to spending of money by a typical jazz fun still this does not ensure that they will spend the money in night clubs. they might spend money in purchase of recordings of jazz and hence does not contribute to success of the night club.thus the amount is not a valid basis for prediction of future successes.
Finally, The argument seems to fall apart if not backed by proper evidence thus for a successful jazz club to be constructed a further comprenhensive analysis are required.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 376 350
No. of Characters: 1777 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.403 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.726 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.282 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.513 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.738 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...eveloped in monroe be quite succesful in monetary terms stating the reason for it...
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...ation of proximity to the local market. also the popularity of jazz music there. al...
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...ation of proximity to the local market. also the popularity of jazz music there. al...
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...so the popularity of jazz music there. also the citing thait a typical jazz fan spe...
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...so the popularity of jazz music there. also the citing thait a typical jazz fan spe...
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...typical jazz fan spends some high amount of money on music. The argument as is st...
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...llacious. The argument makes a number of unwarranted claims. Firstly, The a...
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...ity advantage for the current location. thus claim that the market would be all by ...
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... people attended the monroes annual jazz festival last summer but this does not i...
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... similar amount of crowd will attend the future events also the data shown is for...
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...r thus it is difficult to infer based on the these data. Furthur despite attendin...
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...ert in large amount people do not prefer time in night clubs therefore the attend...
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...is festival remains low. Thirdly, several jazz musician that live monroe does not cont...
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...oes not contribute to the fact that jazz music club will be profitable because th...
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...ht be living monroe because of its other amenities rather than jazz. also this pe...
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...its other amenities rather than jazz. also this people might not visit the jazz ni...
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...its other amenities rather than jazz. also this people might not visit the jazz ni...
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... visit the jazz night club. The argument states that jazz Nightly a show that air...
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... highest rated among other show this may be due to the fact that other programs o...
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...ey will spend the money in night clubs. they might spend money in purchase of recor...
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...te to success of the night club.thus the amount is not a valid basis for predicti...
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...by proper evidence thus for a successful jazz club to be constructed a further co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, third, thirdly, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 376.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96276595745 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3288397957 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510638297872 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 99.0721398219 57.8364921388 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.4 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0666666667 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26666666667 5.70786347227 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 25.0 5.15768463074 485% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 22.0 5.25449101796 419% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374963660458 0.218282227539 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140216809091 0.0743258471296 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0970599860869 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107558814906 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103282971849 0.0628817314937 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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