In a laboratory study of two different industrial cleansers, CleanAll was found to remove 40% more dirt and kill 30% more bacteria than the next best cleanser. Furthermore, a study showed that employees working at buildings cleaned with cleanAll used far fewer sick leaves than employees working in the buildings cleaned with the other cleaners. Therefore, to prevent employee illness, all companies should use CleanAll as their industrial cleaners.
Write the response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In a laboratory study of two different industrial cleaners, Clean All was found to remove more dirt and bacteria than the next best cleanser. Hence the question arises, what are the criteria of next best cleanser? Does, the cleanser compared to Clean All is better by which it has been compared, further the laboratory and its study are reliable or not.
Furthermore, the study showed that employees working at buildings cleaned with Clean All used for fewer sick leaves than employees working in buildings cleaned with other cleansers. The point here made poses a query that how many number of time does the buildings are cleaned, if the building cleaned by Clean All cleaned more time could possibly shows more good results.
Again the point arises that, where these buildings are situated on which this study has been done? If the building cleaned by Clean All surrounded by plants and trees can also be the reason for the good health of employees other then the cleanser used in it. Additionally, what kind of work done in the following buildings? Does, the work done in the building cleaned by clean all is less hygienic then the work done in the other buildings which could also be the reason behind fewer sick leaves of the employees.
Moreover, what is the difference between the working hours of the employees of the buildings, if one which is cleaned by Clean All has less working hours? Hence, employees get enough time for recreational activities and leisure which could possibly the reason behind the better health of the following building’s employees.
While another question arises that what is the difference between the numbers of employee in the following buildings. Since, more employees tend to bring more germs with them. Hence, if the building cleaned by Clean All has lesser number of employees than other buildings, can also be the cause of lesser sick leaves of employees.
Then, who supervises the cleaning in the following buildings. The building cleaned by Clean All may have a sincere supervisor whose wholehearted efforts towards the cleansing of building could also be the cause of good health of employees. The buildings cleaned by Clean All and the other cleanser, how much amount of cleansers is used there, If they are properly used in proportion with the dirt level of buildings or not.
However, it doesn’t seems right to reach the point so early that all companies should start using Clean All as their industrial cleaner, as there could possibly be more reasons behind the fewer sick leaves of the employees. There can be peer pressure among the employees also known as “colleague factor” to remain fit and not let the fat took over the body and remain smart. And, What kind of industry they are in, if one cleaned by Clean All is marketing industry which asks for fit and healthy employees to present well in front of customers and investors in the market. Other than this, what kind of the product the following companies endorse, a company which is endorsing for product tends to make fit and healthy needs to have fit and healthy employees to prove its commitment towards the customers. Hence, before reaching at any conclusion the following industries need to consider the various points.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Three or four arguments are enough.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 548 350
No. of Characters: 2631 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.838 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.801 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.4 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.909 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.317 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.607 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 143, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...d bacteria than the next best cleanser. Hence the question arises, what are the crite...
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Line 3, column 221, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... The point here made poses a query that how many number of time does the buildin...
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Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'many numbers'.
Suggestion: many numbers
...point here made poses a query that how many number of time does the buildings are cleaned,...
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Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
... cleaned by Clean All cleaned more time could possibly shows more good results. Again the p...
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Line 3, column 349, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'show'
Suggestion: show
...an All cleaned more time could possibly shows more good results. Again the point a...
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Line 5, column 224, Rule ID: OTHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'other than'?
Suggestion: other than
...reason for the good health of employees other then the cleanser used in it. Additionally, ...
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Line 5, column 230, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
... for the good health of employees other then the cleanser used in it. Additionally, ...
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Line 5, column 399, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...g cleaned by clean all is less hygienic then the work done in the other buildings wh...
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Line 7, column 235, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...creational activities and leisure which could possibly the reason behind the better health of ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...following building's employees. While another question arises that what is th...
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Line 9, column 119, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...of employee in the following buildings. Since, more employees tend to bring more germ...
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Line 13, column 145, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lean All as their industrial cleaner, as there could possibly be more reasons beh...
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Line 13, column 153, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
... as their industrial cleaner, as there could possibly be more reasons behind the fewer sick l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, while, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2729.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 547.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98903107861 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56822328646 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.404021937843 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 780.3 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3837450581 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.045454545 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8636363636 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330973165745 0.218282227539 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121143757923 0.0743258471296 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116933151363 0.0701772020484 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200973909158 0.128457276422 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10618999562 0.0628817314937 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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