"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because instruction in the online programs takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow, and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased along with our budget deficit. To address these problems, Humana University will begin immediately to create and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni. We predict that instituting these online degree programs will help Humana both increase its total enrollment and solve its budget problems."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
In editorial section an argument is made that Humana University can have both increasements of its student enrollments and solved budgets problems if they initiate online degree program as like Omni University. To support that recommendation author stated that Omni university has less expenditures for their institutions dormitory and classroom spaces. But he failed to represent constructive statistical data to agree on that suggestions.
Firstly, writer stated that the enrollments was very good numbers and the increasement was 50 percent of the students. But he has not showed any statistical and reliable data and survey to believe on that. Moreover, he has not given any example of previous years total population of total students data. Without knowing total population, we can not assume that students admitted more and increased than previous. Furthermore he has not cleared about that weather the university has only online degree or both online and offline classes also.
Secondly, recommender mentioned that as the Omni university taking online classes , their expenditures on class is less. But, it could have been possible that there students number of enrollments was less so their amount spending on classroom and dormitory is less. Moreover, perhaps their students is too less that teachers are not able to come at university and so taking online classes from home.
Similarly, author claimed that Humana university have budget deficit and their maintenance is very high. However, it could be possible that their budget is enough to maintain the building expenditure but due to have poor operations on electricity and other utility bills the cost is high. For example, the office workers are very careless to operate the building, in fact they look over carelessly and they servers their work inattentively which is the main reason behind the high cost for the building maintenance.
Additionally, author make argument that if Humana university promote online degree program then they can cover their budget issues. However, without knowing proper example and clear scenario with reliable, the authority can not take such decisions to sort out the problem. It might be happen that after that their budget issues would be arise more than previous.
In conclusion, I can say that, recommender should draw proper scenario to accept that arguments. Similarly author should create proper data and information to rely on that.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 383 350
No. of Characters: 2016 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.424 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.264 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.698 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.158 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.58 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.842 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.305 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 282, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun expenditures is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... author stated that Omni university has less expenditures for their institutions dor...
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Line 3, column 289, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...revious years total population of total students data. Without knowing total population,...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 413, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...itted more and increased than previous. Furthermore he has not cleared about that weather t...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 536, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...gree or both online and offline classes also. Secondly, recommender mentioned tha...
^^^^
Line 3, column 542, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r both online and offline classes also. Secondly, recommender mentioned that as ...
^^^
Line 4, column 82, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...he Omni university taking online classes , their expenditures on class is less. Bu...
^^
Line 7, column 97, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...oper scenario to accept that arguments. Similarly author should create proper data and in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, for example, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 383.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39164490862 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77277965594 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530026109661 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3618673058 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.684210526 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1578947368 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52631578947 5.70786347227 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21180689436 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624610166467 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056717415567 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101716006316 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794603717921 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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