"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling kinds of cheese at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore,

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"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling kinds of cheese at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The author of the argument purportedly highlights that the company should diminish the number of imported cheeses and rely on domestic cheeses in order to develop profits and stop staggering costs. However, the premises upon which he puts his claim are fallacious. For the support of which more well-established evidence needs to be given.

The first assumption that lacks some semblance of truth and can be overtly impugned is that during last year all of the five selling kinds of cheese stores were domestic cheeses in the city of Wisconsin. However, it does not lend credence to the argument since there is no sufficient evidence to support if other cities had relied on domestic cheeses during last year. One point that should be considered is that the author just provides information about one city and all stores are located in that city. So, there is not enough information about whether other cities relied on domestic or imported. It is also important to say that rely on domestic cheeses just during a year could not guarantee the profit of the company in next years. Indeed, maybe settlements in Wisconsin again prefer to use imported cheeses.

The author also points out that based on a survey, domestic cheeses are increasingly popular among people and citizens prefer consumption of domestic cheeses. Although it might seem tenable at a face, it has some defects due to the paucity of the evidence that would consolidate the premise the otherwise. One of the main, if not the only, problem with the premise is that the survey could not be reliable and accurate owing to the fact that there is not enough data about the way of the conducted survey. In fact, maybe people who could not afford imported cheeses were responders to this survey or maybe the company just wanted to create an advertisement in order to sell domestic cheeses in a large number.

Putting the two previous assumptions aside, there is still room for doubt. As set forth by the author the company have stored both domestic and imported cheese for many years and people based on last year information preferred to buy domestic cheeses. Nevertheless, the rationale behind this premise could be challenged owing to an unsettled evidence to support if people really preferred to rely on domestic cheeses during last year. One point that should not go unnoticed is that may be stored domestic cheeses during many years ago are going to be spoiled and the company decided to sell them in order to inhibit a harmful effect on the companies' income. There is a possibility that people still prefer to buy imported cheeses and the company just want to sell domestic cheeses through advertising.

Having scrutinized all the premises, a logical conclusion that can be drawn is that there a piece of evidence having been ignored by the author while the presence of which could add to the logic of each premise.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 110, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ertly impugned is that during last year all of the five selling kinds of cheese stores wer...
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Line 7, column 641, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'companies'' or 'company's'?
Suggestion: companies'; company's
...rder to inhibit a harmful effect on the companies income. There is a possibility that peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, still, well, while, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2408.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 490.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91428571429 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54295869028 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442857142857 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 758.7 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6466768167 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.736842105 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7894736842 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350399426413 0.218282227539 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117577994944 0.0743258471296 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100139265856 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186137259034 0.128457276422 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104963174912 0.0628817314937 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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argument 1 -- not exactly. 'the five best-selling' just for 'newest store'

argument 2 -- not OK. look:

a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers

we may argue like:
maybe those subscribers are not customers of the stores.

argument 3 -- not OK. here need to use a little math:

support the sales of imported cheese only take 20%, while sales of domestic cheeses take 80%,

but if the profit of imported cheese w ill take 80%, while profit of domestic cheeses take only 20%,

so stop imported cheese will be a big loss.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 490 350
No. of Characters: 2359 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.705 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.814 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.495 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.789 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.589 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.352 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.55 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5