Mayor Switzer has been the mayor of Auburn for the last year and a half. In the last year, crime rates have gone up, unemployment has increased and many businesses have moved out of town. Voting mayor Switzer out will help solve Switzerâs crime problem, will help create jobs and will prevent businesses from having to move. How would you rate the accuracy of the above statement? Support your position with reasons and examples.
The author suggested that to solve Auburn's crime problem, unemployment problem and to prevent businesses from having to move, Auburn should vote mayor Switzer out. Author's suggestion is flawed as there is no proper record and details to prove his or her point. Previous years data required to make point substantiate.
Firsty, In the last year it has been stated that rates of crime have gone up. To substantiate this point, The data which shows the rate of increase in a crime for last year and a half, Additionally increase rate in crime prior to mayor Switze in Auburn. Data will help to determine this increase was valid or invalid to vote for Switzer out. As there could be chance that Earlier increase in crime rate was too high which last year and a half comparely too low. Similarly, We need same data for increase in unemployment so it will help to solve this point is valid or not.
Secondly, Many businesses have moved out of town, This statement is not enough to vote against Switzer. Reasons why businesses have moved to out of town are required, and same data like which we required earlier in case of crime rate. As mayor is not resposnible for all decision of town, It could be possible that other government bodies was the reason of every problem or some of the problem which was the reason for increase in crime rate, unemployment. Even some of the policies which was forced by other goverment bodies was the reason for business to choose moving out of town, Further What if this was the situation and mayor Switzer was the only one who opposing them for good of Auburrn.
Further, As there could be many factors, which must have to taken in consideration without them author's assumption that voting for mayor Switzer out will solve crime, unemployment and business moving outside problem is totally uncertain, Such a big decision Auburn should not take just on brief and vague dat, assumptions and suggestion. Thus, author should provide detailed data of each and every problem with the actual reason behind these problems to substantiate his or her suggestion.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 360 350
No. of Characters: 1689 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.356 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.692 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.436 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.859 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.286 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.378 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.597 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.199 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...ils to prove his or her point. Previous years data required to make point substantiat...
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Line 3, column 236, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly increase rate in crime prior to mayor Switze in Auburn. Data will help to dete...
^^
Line 5, column 463, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...rease in crime rate, unemployment. Even some of the policies which was forced by other gove...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 565, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to move'.
Suggestion: to move
...s was the reason for business to choose moving out of town, Further What if this was t...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, thus, as for, as to, even so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 360.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81666666667 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48736932779 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480555555556 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.1483326634 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.857142857 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.546083641466 0.218282227539 250% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.203620477593 0.0743258471296 274% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125909990201 0.0701772020484 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.335186286122 0.128457276422 261% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825388631049 0.0628817314937 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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