“Techcorporation is our top pick for investment this term. We urge all of our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed satellite technology has been approved by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. That company is Techcorporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not a monopoly. Thus, the new venture of Techcorporation into satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.
In the above newsletter they have said that Investors should invest in Techcorporation for this term. To support this they have gave some points : 1) First time in ten years, A company has developed satellite technology has been approved by the FTA. 2) Last year, A consumer survey shows that respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite televison provider and they want to switch to new satellite provider. This data does not substantiate the claim of newsletter offering. It seem uncertain.
Firstly, They have said that in ten years first time a company has developed satellite technology approved by FTA. But what is the FTA? Is it any authetific organization or goverment organization ?
Is this approval is enough for satellite provider? Are there any more approval required to use this satellite technology? If this satellite technology gets all approval. Is it sufficently good to a company to use as satellite television provider. AS their is various atellite technology which not made for television streaming.
Further, They have stated that their claim is also supported by that the consumer survey showed that they are dissatisfied with current satellite television provider and would want to switch satellite television provider. This consumer surevy were containg the data of which area, region, state or country. How many respondents were there in a surevy? Are they enough to make any conclusion? This survey has taken last year so what about now, There is a chances that after this survey their current provider have changed their plans and have worked for their consumer satisfection. Show what is the situation of current satellite television provider now and still consumer want to switch theri satellite television provider or not. In addition newsletter saying that nee venture Techcorporation into satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest. But what about if Techcorportation does not have the capacity to switch all the consumer and may be they could not reach to the regions that currently satellite provider can reach. What if Techcorporation could not able to statisfy consumers?
In conclusion, There are many point on which newsletter should work. I remained unconvince with the information provided in newsletter. They has to provide authentic proofs, data and stastics to make their claim firm and strong.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: GAVE_GIVE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'give'?
Suggestion: give
...or this term. To support this they have gave some points : 1 First time in ten years...
^^^^
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'given'.
Suggestion: given
...or this term. To support this they have gave some points : 1 First time in ten years...
^^^^
Line 1, column 488, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'seems'?
Suggestion: seems
...te the claim of newsletter offering. It seem uncertain. Firstly, They have said t...
^^^^
Line 4, column 122, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...uired to use this satellite technology? If this satellite technology gets all appr...
^^
Line 4, column 250, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...se as satellite television provider. AS their is various atellite technology which no...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 444, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'There are a chances'?
Suggestion: There are a chances
... has taken last year so what about now, There is a chances that after this survey their current pr...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 453, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a chance' or simply 'chances'?
Suggestion: a chance; chances
...n last year so what about now, There is a chances that after this survey their current pr...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 736, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...atellite television provider or not. In addition newsletter saying that nee venture Tech...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 972, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...capacity to switch all the consumer and may be they could not reach to the regions tha...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 142, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...nformation provided in newsletter. They has to provide authentic proofs, data and s...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, still, then, as to, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2017.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 378.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33597883598 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94297016757 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460317460317 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.1868471126 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.68 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.12 23.324526521 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44 5.70786347227 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299517214242 0.218282227539 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954387589997 0.0743258471296 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936861215631 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202425216086 0.128457276422 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116935366835 0.0628817314937 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.3550499002 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.1 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: GAVE_GIVE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'give'?
Suggestion: give
...or this term. To support this they have gave some points : 1 First time in ten years...
^^^^
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'given'.
Suggestion: given
...or this term. To support this they have gave some points : 1 First time in ten years...
^^^^
Line 1, column 488, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'seems'?
Suggestion: seems
...te the claim of newsletter offering. It seem uncertain. Firstly, They have said t...
^^^^
Line 4, column 122, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...uired to use this satellite technology? If this satellite technology gets all appr...
^^
Line 4, column 250, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...se as satellite television provider. AS their is various atellite technology which no...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 444, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'There are a chances'?
Suggestion: There are a chances
... has taken last year so what about now, There is a chances that after this survey their current pr...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 453, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a chance' or simply 'chances'?
Suggestion: a chance; chances
...n last year so what about now, There is a chances that after this survey their current pr...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 736, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...atellite television provider or not. In addition newsletter saying that nee venture Tech...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 972, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...capacity to switch all the consumer and may be they could not reach to the regions tha...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 142, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...nformation provided in newsletter. They has to provide authentic proofs, data and s...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, still, then, as to, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2017.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 378.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33597883598 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94297016757 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460317460317 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.1868471126 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.68 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.12 23.324526521 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44 5.70786347227 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299517214242 0.218282227539 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0954387589997 0.0743258471296 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936861215631 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202425216086 0.128457276422 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116935366835 0.0628817314937 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.3550499002 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.1 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.