An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition.
The author contends that an ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor's record of treating similarity afflicted patients. I agree with the author's point and reason. As author stated easy access will definitely help the patients to determine whether doctor is good for him/her.
First of all, As author stated doctor's record of treatment should be easily available to the patient, These data will help patient, How? Data is one of the factor on which patient can trust. Data provide more accurate information of doctor's experties than bomabstic talk of hospital. What these data should contain? Data which shows the information of patient condition from starting to end and which treatment was offered by doctor, How much time it took etcetera. These data should not contain the name of patient so privacy of patients would remain safe.
Additionally, Take an example of cancer patient who is belong to middle class family. Now, treatment of cancer is vary expensive, middle class family could not take a risk of choosing any doctor on the basis of advertisement or information from any random source. They need proper data and recored history of the doctor which will help them to choose which doctor they can trust. These way seems better for even any patient. But now consider if these kind of record is not available then if doctors fail to improve the situation of patient and make it even worsen, definitely family has to look for another doctor which will cost patient more. Who wants to spend more money? Obvious, No-one. That is why it is requird that patient should have knowledge of doctor's previous records.
On the other hand, If the young doctor is talented, But he/she do not have such a record then patient would not easily trust him/her. Which eventually create one type of monopoly in which only old and experienced doctors get benifit, adn there would be no entry for young and talented doctors.
In sum, There is no doubt that ailing patient should have easy access to his/her doctor's previous records of same diseases, as patient is risking his/her life and even spending good amount of money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 56, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'belonged'.
Suggestion: belonged
...ake an example of cancer patient who is belong to middle class family. Now, treatment ...
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Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'varied'.
Suggestion: varied
...ass family. Now, treatment of cancer is vary expensive, middle class family could no...
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Line 5, column 381, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this way' or 'These ways'?
Suggestion: This way; These ways
... to choose which doctor they can trust. These way seems better for even any patient. But ...
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Line 5, column 446, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...r even any patient. But now consider if these kind of record is not available then if doct...
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Line 7, column 64, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...he young doctor is talented, But he/she do not have such a record then patient wou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, so, then, as to, kind of, no doubt, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 362.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91988950276 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33955069431 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516574585635 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.9467075431 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7368421053 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0526315789 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68421052632 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450465572649 0.243740707755 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144979309257 0.0831039109588 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14642971667 0.0758088955206 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290427433309 0.150359130593 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131496952911 0.0667264976115 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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