"Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora's citizens met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author claims that there has been a great decline in the physical fitness amongst the citizens of Corpora due to decrease in economy. Further author claims that fitness levels will again improve with improvement in the economy. But author clearly misses some key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated, to come to the conclusion. The author justifies that low expenditure on fitness related products is due to decline in economy. But on careful scrutiny, the evidences presented by author provide very less credibility to the conclusion.
Firstly, medical experts claim that the recent decrease in fitness levels of Corpora citizens is due to increase in the time that they spend in front of a computer. The author clearly refutes the claim of medical experts by mentioning a result that fitness levels are highest in the regions of Corpora where highest number of computers are owned. But no evidence is given to support the claim of highest levels of fitness in that specific region. It might be true that medical experts are actually correct and the survey on which the claimed results are presented by author was flawed. Even if we assume that the area with highest computer ownership is the most physically fit, there is not evidence to actually support the usage in that particular area. It might be true that the area actually had highest number of computers but people rarely used them. If it turns out that these facts were actually true, it would strongly weaken the authors argument of refuting the claims by medical experts.
Secondly, the author claims that there is recent decrease in the consumption of fitness related products. But again there is no evidence to support this claim. It might be very likely that the study was done on some specific product or brand and people might have stopped using those products or brands. Also, another possible senario is people might have shifted to more natural and home made fitness products. They might have actually started doing yoga which does not require any equipment as such. Again without knowing answer to these questions, it is very difficult to co-relate the decrease in usage of fitness products as the main reason for decrease in the fitness level of Corpora citizens.
Lastly, without any evidence or support author states that the decrease in economy is the reason for decrease in fitness levels. Furthermore, author assumes that as economy would become more stable people, the fitness level of the people would automatically improve. This assumption of author is filled with rifts and needs much support. Also the change in the fitness levels is compared with the the twenty years old result. It might be true that the lifestyle of people is actually affected due to recent advancements in computer technology. There is no evidence to the trend of the fitness levels over these years. Without the trend, we can not make any relation between changing lifestyles and the fitness levels. It might have been true that the fitness levels gradually decreased from half to quater in these twenty years. Also, there has been no evidence to support the economy trends and the trends in fitness levels. It might be true that even with higher fitness levels, the economy was similar twenty years back. If this turns out to be true, the authors conclusion would be really undermined.
In conlusion, the argument is clearly unpersuasive as it stands. To futher bolster it, author must provide more evidences to support his claims of relating recent decrease in economy with the decrease in fitness levels. Finally answer to above raised questions are a must to make any reason about the recent decrease in the fitness levels of the citizens od Corpora.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Also, another possible senario is people might have shifted to more natural and home made fitness products.
Error: senario Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: It might have been true that the fitness levels gradually decreased from half to quater in these twenty years.
Error: quater Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In conlusion, the argument is clearly unpersuasive as it stands.
Error: unpersuasive Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: conlusion Suggestion: confusion
Sentence: To futher bolster it, author must provide more evidences to support his claims of relating recent decrease in economy with the decrease in fitness levels.
Error: futher Suggestion: father
Sentence: Finally answer to above raised questions are a must to make any reason about the recent decrease in the fitness levels of the citizens od Corpora.
Error: od Suggestion: No alternate word
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argument 1 -- only this is correct:
Even if we assume that the area with highest computer ownership is the most physically fit, there is not evidence to actually support the usage in that particular area. It might be true that the area actually had highest number of computers but people rarely used them.
in GRE, we always consider the data is reliable.
argument 2 -- not OK.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 32 15
No. of Words: 626 350
No. of Characters: 3051 1500
No. of Different Words: 230 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.002 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.874 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.338 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 255 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 179 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.562 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.825 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.594 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.476 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
... of Corpora due to decrease in economy. Further author claims that fitness levels will ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 303, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'where the highest'.
Suggestion: where the highest
...s are highest in the regions of Corpora where highest number of computers are owned. But no e...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the highest'.
Suggestion: of the highest
... evidence is given to support the claim of highest levels of fitness in that specific regi...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 619, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the highest'.
Suggestion: with the highest
...flawed. Even if we assume that the area with highest computer ownership is the most physical...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 796, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'had the highest'.
Suggestion: had the highest
...It might be true that the area actually had highest number of computers but people rarely u...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 939, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ally true, it would strongly weaken the authors argument of refuting the claims by medi...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 339, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...lled with rifts and needs much support. Also the change in the fitness levels is com...
^^^^
Line 7, column 394, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... in the fitness levels is compared with the the twenty years old result. It might be tr...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 394, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... in the fitness levels is compared with the the twenty years old result. It might be tr...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1059, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...back. If this turns out to be true, the authors conclusion would be really undermined. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 221, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...my with the decrease in fitness levels. Finally answer to above raised questions are a ...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 268, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
... answer to above raised questions are a must to make any reason about the recent decrea...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 346, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt decrease in the fitness levels of the citizens od Corpora.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, lastly, really, second, secondly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 13.6137724551 169% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 55.5748502994 158% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3117.0 2260.96107784 138% => OK
No of words: 626.0 441.139720559 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97923322684 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00199880112 4.56307096286 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40661247928 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.38178913738 0.468620217663 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 982.8 705.55239521 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 19.7664670659 162% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2125707891 57.8364921388 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.40625 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5625 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09375 5.70786347227 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 27.0 8.20758483034 329% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0664456408491 0.218282227539 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0227562903445 0.0743258471296 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334009555375 0.0701772020484 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0440680058437 0.128457276422 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170838125689 0.0628817314937 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 98.500998004 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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