In the above letter, the movie director tells the company to increase the funding of the movie and the movie will be a failure if it doesn't get the required money. The proof that the writer points out that the director is a novice and will be waste full based on his previous industry and inexperienced assistant producers and director will lead to extra money cost for the company.
Firstly the writer state that because the director is from the advertising business and the advertising is notoriously wasteful the director will be wasteful. This claim is biased as one cannot judge the working method of a director from his previous industry. Every individual has a unique style and method of doing their work. One cannot merely generalize based on industry. Maybe commercials shooting requires to take multiple takes for one scene. Which won't be a case in movie making. Hence the writer should give more information about this specific director to convince me to increase the funding of the movie.
Secondly, the author states that the advertising business is wasteful. Never does he give any data suggestings this.
Thirdly the writer assumes that the inexperienced assistant producers and director they have will take extra time to arrange things on set. Even if they take more time than experienced assistant producers and director, The delay may not be as huge such the studio would have to pay the actor and crews extra time.
Because of the above reason I find the author's argument to be unwarranted. The author fails to convince me to increase the funding of the movies.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 270 350
No. of Characters: 1295 1500
No. of Different Words: 135 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.054 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.796 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.503 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 87 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.501 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.59 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 134, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...e and the movie will be a failure if it doesnt get the required money. The proof that ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'taking'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: taking
...ry. Maybe commercials shooting requires to take multiple takes for one scene. Which won...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 452, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s to take multiple takes for one scene. Which wont be a case in movie making. Hence t...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 490, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
.... Which wont be a case in movie making. Hence the writer should give more information...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... pay the actor and crews extra time. Because of the above reason I find the authors ...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 40, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... Because of the above reason I find the authors argument to be unwarranted. The author ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 55.5748502994 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1327.0 2260.96107784 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 268.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95149253731 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54908103071 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514925373134 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 705.55239521 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.3402495516 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4666666667 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8666666667 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53333333333 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196019004511 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616440932194 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610422533363 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0927049553223 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683816729991 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.3799401198 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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