A movie producer sent the following memo to the head of the movie studio.
“We need to increase the funding for the movie Working title by 10° in order to ensure a quality product. As you know, we are working with a first-time director, whose only previous experience has been shooting commercials for a shampoo company. Since the advertising business is notoriously wasteful, it stands to reason that our director will expect to be able to shoot take after take, without concern for how much time is being spent on any one scene. In addition, while we have saved money by hiring relatively inexperienced assistant producers and directors, this savings in salary will undoubtedly translate to greater expenditures in paying the actors and unionized crew overtime for the extra hours they will spend on the set waiting for the assistant directors and producers to arrange things. If we don’t get this extra money, the movie is virtually assured to be a failure.”
The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, argument is based on unwarrented assumption that the first time director, whose only previous experience has been shooting commercials for a shampoo company will be similarly wasteful in directing movies as he was in directing commercials, rendering its conclusion, that the if they don't get extra money the movie will fail, invalid.
The argumet fails to provide any justification that the first-time director whose only experience has been directing commercials will be similarly wasteful in directing movies as he was in directing commercials.
for one, the director may be working on a movie for first time but it is also possible that he might have worked as an assistant director in movies and is well aware of differences in spendin in commercials and movies. The immportant idea could explain the that the new director will not take shot after shot and spend money wastefully as he used to do in commercials.
The argument would be more convencing if it provided more information about how new director is lacking experience in movie direction. even then, the argument would have to further prove that, how he will not learn new things about movie direction before starting his firt work as a movie-director.
The argument also leaves many other unanswered questions. even if the first-time director will spend money wastefully and the producer have to hire inexperienced assistant producers and directors in order to save money, it not neccesary that thease new, inexperienced producers and directors will lead to greater expendeture in paying actors and crew overtime, it is possible that these new assitant directors and producers are inexperienced but will perform well on their first project.
Because argument makes sevral unjustified assumptions, it fails to make convencing case that if the funding for the movie Working Title is not increased by 10%, the movie will fail.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 314 350
No. of Characters: 1613 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.21 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.137 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.881 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.72 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.456 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.853 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.319 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...dering its conclusion, that the if they dont get extra money the movie will fail, in...
^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...s as he was in directing commercials. for one, the director may be working on a m...
^^^
Line 9, column 136, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
... lacking experience in movie direction. even then, the argument would have to furthe...
^^^^
Line 13, column 59, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
...leaves many other unanswered questions. even if the first-time director will spend m...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, similarly, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 55.5748502994 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 313.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30670926518 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93782085444 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501597444089 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.226795333 57.8364921388 192% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.1 119.503703932 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.3 23.324526521 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299037606127 0.218282227539 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130467703776 0.0743258471296 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0886222066904 0.0701772020484 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176979440461 0.128457276422 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048784077331 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 14.3799401198 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 48.3550499002 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.11 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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