"A nationwide survey reveals that the two most-desired home features are a large family room and a large, well-appointed kitchen. A number of homes in our area built by our competitor Domus Construction have such features and have sold much faster and at significantly higher prices than the national average. To boost sales and profits, we should increase the size of the family rooms and kitchens in all the homes we build and should make state-of-the-art kitchens a standard feature. Moreover, our larger family rooms and kitchens can come at the expense of the dining room, since many of our recent buyers say they do not need a separate dining room for family meals."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The manager of the construction company has claimed that the sales and profits will boost, if they modify their pattern of home building, by increasing the size of family room and kitchen, thereby eliminating dining hall from their plan. The manager of construction company has cited this conclusion based on the evidence from their competitor construction company which has sold its home unit much faster and with higher profit by adopting different strategy and also he has come to the conclusion based on the nationwide survey report on some random article along with their recent buyer feedbacks. However, before his recommendation are made, three question ought to be answered thoroughly.
First of all, how wise is it to change working policy of its company based on the market available random survey's report? Infact, the survey accuracy, nature of sample and method of surveying has not been clearly mentioned in the article. For an instance, the survey team might have asked its question with leading way resulting the answer biased and prejudiced one. There are maximum chances that the survey question might not have been asked to proper sample group i.e people who want to buy house in near future, or the surveyor might have asked question to the individual who is living in a joint family needing a big size kitchen. So, if either these condition has merit, then conclusion drawn on original argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, how approprirate is it to compare the business model of competitor construction company to its own based on its sale frrequency and selling price higher than average one? Infact, the business model, its working mechanism might be totally different than the author's business. For an instance, the operating cost and the fixed cost of rival business might have been high,or the investment to revenue ratio might have been higher than the author business. Thus, the idea of adjusting one's business based on apparent profit that other company might or might not have generated from its increased sale is very absurd. In an ideal condition increased number of sales result increased profit, but,if reality is such that there are operational cost and several other high investment required to make a product sold in a market. Hence, the assumption the author has made based on this evidence seems speculous.
Furthermore, changing its format of work and long term plan based on few buyers response is not quite wise. The buyer who had recently bought the home from them might have come from different sets of background but assuming the homogenity in the customers need is not a good business strategy. There are diverse customers who might want the home having large dining hall . For an instance, the expansion of kitchen might cost hugh compared to the dining as the modular kitchen these days cost higher which might increase the investment thereby casuing loss to company. So, the decision should be made by throughly assessing the risk and proper cost estimation. Otherwise, the plan if changed based on this unwarrented assumption might lead to a big loss for the company.
In this way, the author should thoroughly do the risk assessment and financial projection of cost and revenue before changing its working model and unwarrentedly simulating its competitor business model. If these questions are properly assessed and plan if made by considering holisticly then the company profit might boost in future.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 569 350
No. of Characters: 2846 1500
No. of Different Words: 255 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.884 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.002 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.543 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 207 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 150 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 106 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.864 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.745 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.517 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2908.0 2260.96107784 129% => OK
No of words: 566.0 441.139720559 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13780918728 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87757670434 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58856181641 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 204.123752495 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478798586572 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 904.5 705.55239521 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.5462985239 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.181818182 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7272727273 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.40909090909 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132667065022 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0402198443171 0.0743258471296 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448959333637 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0765091801724 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392083766017 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 98.500998004 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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