Nature’s Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature’s Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville’s schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
The argument that the nature's way store would be very successful in the town of Plainsville becuse the residents lead healthy lives may seem to be logical at first glance. The author makes a valid arguement, one that would be correct if its premises were true. However, the author's conclusion relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence, and it uses terms that lacks definition.
First, the author assumes that since the residents of Plainsville leads a healthy life which is evident via the report provided by Plainsville merchants on the significant purchase of running shoes and exercise clothing, the large members of the large helath club and having a full class of weight training and aerobics, that nature's way store would be successful, what of if the residents still do exercises but do not eat healthy food, and believe they can eat unhelathy food but would still be healthy with the regular exercises they do. Supposed, for example, the residents have a subjective perspective that food is not a criteria for healthy living, and beilive all they need to do to live healthy is exercise. Equally, the assumption that Plainsville’s schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers because of its fitness for life program is not a gurantee that they would be interested in eating healthy. Especially children that are just growing and would prefer to eat a lot of unhealthy food other than eating healthy.
The notion that the nature's way store would be successful because of the healthy living of the residents of Plainsville, majorly from engaging in exercises would be stregthened by additional evidence that the residents are also opened to eating helathy along side exercises. The author's argument would be stregthened considerably if the author provided evidence of a direct relationship between eating helathy and engaging in exercises.
In conclusion, the writer would not necessarily be wrong to assert that the nature's way store would be successful and would thrive due to the healthy living of the residents of Plainsville. After all, helathy living involving exercises could necessitate eating helathy. but to support the current conclusion thst the nature's way store would be successful due to the helathy living of Plainsvillemajorly from the exercises they induged in, the author must submit more conclusive evidence that exrecises would necessitate helathy foood which nature's way offers.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 392 350
No. of Characters: 2028 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.45 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.173 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.825 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.448 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.437 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.631 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 275, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...if its premises were true. However, the authors conclusion relies on assumptions for wh...
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Line 3, column 626, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a criterion' or simply 'criteria'?
Suggestion: a criterion; criteria
...subjective perspective that food is not a criteria for healthy living, and beilive all the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 254, Rule ID: ALONG_SIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'alongside'?
Suggestion: alongside
...dents are also opened to eating helathy along side exercises. The authors argument would b...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 280, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ating helathy along side exercises. The authors argument would be stregthened considera...
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Line 7, column 271, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...cises could necessitate eating helathy. but to support the current conclusion thst ...
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Line 7, column 561, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...helathy foood which natures way offers.
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, then, after all, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2070.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 392.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2806122449 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88439535572 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47193877551 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 119.426058016 57.8364921388 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 172.5 119.503703932 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.6666666667 23.324526521 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218965220127 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0981262854379 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860420440974 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166043348919 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357091448898 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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