Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
The assumptions of the authors are written in the memo about Nature’s Way; a chain of store health food will be very successful in Plainsville sounds illogically convince with several reasons. The author ignores important information and some question needed to be answered in order to decide the recommendation is likely to have predicted results.
First, the author provides no assurance that the merchants report which the argument depends is statistically reliable. The report does not mention the number of people, who purchase shoes, their gender, and their age. Perhaps the survey’s respondents are not representative of the overall population of people who live in this city. In addition, it is possible the number of reports was too low to ensure that most people like to buy shoes during a year.
Second, base on the fact the local health club has more members than before; the author infers that people pay more attention on their health. However, it is not necessarily the case. People may go to the health club for meeting their friends not doing physical activities. Moreover, if we accept they go to the club for exercise, there is no evidence to show people like to use health foods. In fact, it is possible the city has not any recreation facilities and people have to fill their spare time with going to these clubs. Since the author ignores this possibility, the recommendation can not be acceptable.
Third, the author relies that the assumption that the new generation of schoolchildren are required to take part in a fitness-for-life program, so they like to be customers of health foods. Although, the common sense informs me that this relationship is exists, the author must provide clear evidence of this relationships. Furthermore, it is entirely possible next generations do not tend to participate in this program as well as use health foods. Without considering this possible scenario, the author cannot justifiably conclude that the stores will have more customers in this city.
In sum, the argument is rationally flawed and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the argument, the author must more clear evidence that merchants’ reports reflect the general population. In order to evaluate the recommendation, we need to know about all possible factors, which lead people to go to the health clubs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'well', 'as to', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.272311212815 0.25644967241 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.151029748284 0.15541462614 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0732265446224 0.0836205057962 88% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0549199084668 0.0520304965353 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0343249427918 0.0272364105082 126% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.105263157895 0.125424944231 84% => OK
Participles: 0.0228832951945 0.0416121511921 55% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9916384826 2.79052419416 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0434782608696 0.026700313972 163% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.116704805492 0.113004496875 103% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0160183066362 0.0255425247493 63% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0114416475973 0.0127820249294 90% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2368.0 2731.13054187 87% => OK
No of words: 383.0 446.07635468 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.18276762402 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.57801047555 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.391644908616 0.378187486979 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.268929503916 0.287650121315 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.198433420366 0.208842608468 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.13315926893 0.135150697306 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9916384826 2.79052419416 107% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 207.018472906 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532637075718 0.469332199767 113% => OK
Word variations: 59.0890426356 52.1807786196 113% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 20.1578947368 23.2022227129 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.28302661 57.7814097925 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.631578947 141.986410481 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1578947368 23.2022227129 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.842105263158 0.724660767414 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 47.0508451285 51.9672348444 91% => OK
Elegance: 1.66666666667 1.8405768891 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404062832428 0.441005458295 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.103920316101 0.135418324435 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0573699850679 0.0829849096947 69% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.572431278066 0.58762219726 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0978763046004 0.147661913831 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16175513968 0.193483328276 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805718846768 0.0970749176394 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.413111298599 0.42659136922 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0254787713353 0.0774707102158 33% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290827409763 0.312017818177 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0924224098729 0.0698173142475 132% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 14.657635468 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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