"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers
complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to onethird
of what it used to be.
Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet
available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside
Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few
complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since
the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all
twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more
dramatically."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to
decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to
explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The argument address a recommendation that reducing showerhead water pressure to one third of it’s current value would lead to significant saving of monthly water bills. This recommendation validation need to be investigated through proper answers of a set of questions.
For instance, the author need to provide a logically accepted proper answer about what is the proper evidence of monthly water bill reduction since applying this intended procedure. Pehaps this procedure onlt reduced the water flow pressure and not the amaount of water consumed by the customers. Thus, a clear answer need to be provided as the author noted that no bill received yet since applying this strategy.
Furthermore, The author need to show that the recorded number of complaints will not lead to a decrease in number of customers in future, which in return would decline the profit as well. Consequently, the author need to show a proper answer to what is the strategy devoted to solve these complaints. This question anwer would significantly bolster the addressed recommendation of the argument.
Moreover, the a clear proper answer need to be endorse how much are the all twelve biulding water aspects congurint. Maybe some of the buidling sufering a lower water flow pressure than the other building which engender a serious problems for the customer and then reduce the overall profit.
Consequently, the author need to provide answer about what is finance strategy efficientcy in treating the complaints raised by the custimers as a result of the redcution of water flow pressure. Perhaps this would lead to return the water flow pressure to a higher level which will not lead to proper water bills saving at the end of the day and then this countered strategy would be insufficient in increasing the profits.
In addition to a clear proper answer about how effiecient does this reduction of water flow strategy in increasing the over all profit. Perhaps there are some other strategies, which enhance profit significantly higher than water flow reduction strategy that encounter a probable rist due to customer complaints.
These prvioulsy demonstrated questions are a sample of a set of questions that is needed to be answer properly in order to validate the extent of the addressed recommendation success.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The argument address a recommendation that reducing showerhead water pressure to one third of it's current value would lead to significant saving of monthly water bills.
Error: showerhead Suggestion: showered
Sentence: Pehaps this procedure onlt reduced the water flow pressure and not the amaount of water consumed by the customers.
Error: onlt Suggestion: only
Error: amaount Suggestion: amount
Sentence: This question anwer would significantly bolster the addressed recommendation of the argument.
Error: anwer Suggestion: anger
Sentence: Moreover, the a clear proper answer need to be endorse how much are the all twelve biulding water aspects congurint.
Error: biulding Suggestion: building
Error: congurint Suggestion: conjuring
Sentence: Maybe some of the buidling sufering a lower water flow pressure than the other building which engender a serious problems for the customer and then reduce the overall profit.
Error: sufering Suggestion: suffering
Error: buidling Suggestion: building
Sentence: Consequently, the author need to provide answer about what is finance strategy efficientcy in treating the complaints raised by the custimers as a result of the redcution of water flow pressure.
Error: efficientcy Suggestion: efficiently
Error: custimers Suggestion: customers
Error: redcution Suggestion: reduction
Sentence: In addition to a clear proper answer about how effiecient does this reduction of water flow strategy in increasing the over all profit.
Error: effiecient Suggestion: efficient
Sentence: Perhaps there are some other strategies, which enhance profit significantly higher than water flow reduction strategy that encounter a probable rist due to customer complaints.
Error: rist Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: These prvioulsy demonstrated questions are a sample of a set of questions that is needed to be answer properly in order to validate the extent of the addressed recommendation success.
Error: prvioulsy Suggestion: previously
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 372 350
No. of Characters: 1898 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.392 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.102 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.788 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.268 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.396 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.708 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... proper answers of a set of questions. For instance, the author need to provide...
^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ived yet since applying this strategy. Furthermore, The author need to show tha...
^^^
Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ad to a decrease in number of customers in future, which in return would decline the prof...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ressed recommendation of the argument. Moreover, the a clear proper answer need...
^^^
Line 4, column 14, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
...endation of the argument. Moreover, the a clear proper answer need to be endorse ...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 126, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...biulding water aspects congurint. Maybe some of the buidling sufering a lower water flow pr...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 233, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'problem'?
Suggestion: problem
...other building which engender a serious problems for the customer and then reduce the ov...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er and then reduce the overall profit. Consequently, the author need to provide...
^^^
Line 5, column 51, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ently, the author need to provide answer about what is finance strategy efficient...
^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nsufficient in increasing the profits. In addition to a clear proper answer abo...
^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...bable rist due to customer complaints. These prvioulsy demonstrated questions a...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, then, third, thus, well, for instance, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 372.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21505376344 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87007658031 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.438172043011 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.9 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2533090427 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.333333333 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 5.70786347227 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156787041489 0.218282227539 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665095391746 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450103557063 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0908309213892 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475224450489 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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