Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. The result is an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. In order to address this growing problem, the council must ban cell phone use on sidewalks. Not only do people texting or using their phones slow down pedestrian traffic, but they are also more likely to walk into the road or bump into other walkers. Children are especially vulnerable because they are too short to be easily seen. Middletown passed such a ban and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly.
while it may be true that, in order to address the sidewalk rage problem the Centerville city Council should ban cell phone use on sidewalks, this author's argument is not cogent enough. Primarily, the argument assumes what policy was successful in the case of other city will be similarly successful for the Centerville city but the argument has not provided any deep analysis over the two cities before making this conclusion.
The argument states that Middletown passed a ban to stop cell phone use on sidewalks. However, it may be true that the Middletown has the finest sidewalk structure in the state and have no shops on the sidewalks and it is the unrestrained cell phone use of the pedestrian which was responsible for all complaints of sidewalk rage. In order to address the fact the city council there banned cell phone use on sidewalks and no complains are reported consequently. So, Their ban was actually successful because the city council there properly analyzed the problem and found out the actual cause of the sidewalk rage and responded accordingly.
On the other hand, the city under consideration might have the worst sidewalk structure in the entire state and at the same time, shops might have been installed right on the sidewalk precluding free flow of pedestrian traffic, and thus responsible for the sidewalk rage problem. So, in order to address the problem the city council needs to reconstruct the sidewalk and remove all shops from the footpath to ensure free flow of pedestrian traffic. Had the argument stated in detail that the sidewalk condition of those two cities are mirror image of one another, only than we can conclude that the ban on cell phone use might be successful in Centerville city.
Even then, the argument needs to address the behavior of the city people of the two cities. It may happen that, Middletown's people, being educated, are docile and show their respect for any imposed law or ban upon them while the people of Centerville are rebellious and stubborn:show no respect to law. So, before concluding that the ban would be successful in Centerville it must be made clear that the city people are going to show their respect and keep themselves away from using cell phone while on the sidewalk.
At the same time, it might be true that the Middletown, being a busy city, the people are always in a hurry and their is no time for anyone of them to place complaint on trivial fact like sidewalk rage because they have some other major problems in hand. On the other hand, Centerville being a slow city, the people have enough time to make quarrel on the sidewalk and complain about the fact and at the same time they might be habitually complaining also. So, before concluding anything, we need to understand clearly about the behavior of the city people.
In conclusion, it can be said that the two cities might not be same and what was successful in one city might be found failed for the other one. So, in order to become a more persuasive one, this argument needs to address some of its unwarranted assumptions and answer some questions, otherwise the argument is not cogent enough.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 543 350
No. of Characters: 2552 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.827 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.7 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.509 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.941 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.902 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.824 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.408 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.655 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.193 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
while it may be true that, in order to addres...
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Line 9, column 113, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...y, the people are always in a hurry and their is no time for anyone of them to place ...
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Line 9, column 452, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...me they might be habitually complaining also. So, before concluding anything, we nee...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, but, consequently, however, may, similarly, so, then, thus, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2609.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 542.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81365313653 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57334241842 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.392988929889 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 826.2 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.2276022305 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.470588235 119.503703932 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8823529412 23.324526521 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52941176471 5.70786347227 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0866257755252 0.218282227539 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373036303327 0.0743258471296 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368887518373 0.0701772020484 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0542570145183 0.128457276422 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386502807419 0.0628817314937 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.21 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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