"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the above letter store owner concludes that the shoppers in the central plaza has decrease because the skateborders population has increased. However he fails to establish the relation between the ncrease in population of the skateborders and decrease in population of the shoppers. However, the conclusion drawn by the store owner contains unfounded assumptions that if substaintiated dramatically weakens the argument. Thus the following three questions need to be addressed.
Firstly, Was the decrease in business only because of the number of skateboarders?? I t may be possible that there is inflation going in the market which led to decreaser in population of the shoppers. It may also be possible that the they are getting same product at cheaper price near there vicinity. It may be also possile the store owners have some preudice with the skateboarders and want to eradicate them from the plaza. It may be also possible that the statment made about the decrease in business may be flawed as the store owner fail to produce any balance sheet.If either of the above scenario proves true then the assertion of the store owner is significantly hampered.
Secondly, Was the dramatic increase in litter and vandalism cause by skateboarders? It may be possible that there are many food stalls in the plaza who provide hand tissues and other wrapping papers which are thrown by the customers nearby stall premises which causes litter. It may be possible there are less number of police for the area and less number of security for the plaza whcih resulted in increase in vandalism instances. If either of the above scenario proves true then the assertion of the store owner does not hold water.
Lastly, is there any direct releation between the decrease in number of shoppers and increase in nuber of the skateboarders?? As the store owner fails to state the releation there are very less chances that after eradicating skateboarders the number of shoppers will increase. Also the shop owner fails to mention that there are any complaints received from the customers against the skateboarders. If either of the above proves true the credibility of the arguments increases.
In the conclusion while the number of shoppers has decrease, more data is required before the conclusion is reached. If the store owner answers the above three questons, it will be possible to fully evalute the validity of the argument
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 146, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... skateborders population has increased. However he fails to establish the relation betw...
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Line 1, column 425, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ated dramatically weakens the argument. Thus the following three questions need to b...
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Line 2, column 231, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'they'?
Suggestion: the; they
... shoppers. It may also be possible that the they are getting same product at cheaper pri...
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Line 2, column 428, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... want to eradicate them from the plaza. It may be also possible that the statment ...
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Line 2, column 573, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...owner fail to produce any balance sheet.If either of the above scenario proves tru...
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Line 2, column 573, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...owner fail to produce any balance sheet.If either of the above scenario proves tru...
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Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ted in increase in vandalism instances. If either of the above scenario proves tru...
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Line 4, column 189, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun chances is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...s to state the releation there are very less chances that after eradicating skateboa...
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Line 4, column 277, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...s the number of shoppers will increase. Also the shop owner fails to mention that th...
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Line 4, column 399, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he customers against the skateboarders. If either of the above proves true the cre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2025.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08793969849 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80766612437 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.442211055276 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 645.3 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8583959717 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.578947368 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9473684211 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57894736842 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291034129299 0.218282227539 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0955866925261 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773127894227 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164418386232 0.128457276422 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285386720953 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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