"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
The writer of above argument has drawn the conclusion that by prohibiting skateboarding in central plaza, business will increase like before. This conclusion is drawn on the basis of disjointed and incomplete data. The argument suffers from several critical flaws as discussed below.
Firstly, without any statistics the writer has assumed a correlation between decreasing shoppers and increasing skateboarding. There can be several other factors that caused the popularity of central plaza to decrease. For example, factors like opening of other plazas, increase in prizes at central plaza, closing down of certain shops at central plaza etc. could play a role in decreasing popularity of central plaza.
Secondly, the writer highlights a dramatic increase in litter and vandalism but provides no details on who is causing it. There is a high chance that the shop owners or some of the shoppers could be causing it leaving skateboarders free from blame. And due to the unsanitation of the place, most shoppers have stopped coming to central plaza.
Thirdly, the author has unfairly assumed that because of increasing popularity of skateboarding in the city, number of skateboard users in the plaza has also substantially increased. Also, assuming that skateboarders at the plaza have increased: there is a fair chance that more shoppers would visit to see skateboarders and prohibiting skateboarding might lead shoppers to go away.
In general, it may be said that the writer has failed to make a convincing argument because of the complete absence of statistical data. Other factors that may cause a decline in shoppers like development of other plazas, price increase at plaza have to be ruled out first. A more detailed study on who is causing litter at the plaza would help strengthen the argument. In short, there are many questions that must be addressed because they are crucial to draw any conclusion.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, in general, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 307.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27035830619 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89627289699 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511400651466 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4319695414 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.125 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1875 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318977156691 0.218282227539 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108715655432 0.0743258471296 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851728820782 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173361576625 0.128457276422 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0789776831292 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, in general, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 307.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27035830619 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89627289699 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511400651466 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4319695414 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.125 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1875 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318977156691 0.218282227539 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108715655432 0.0743258471296 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851728820782 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173361576625 0.128457276422 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0789776831292 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.