Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
The author is asserting that if skateboarding in Central Plaza is prohibited, business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high. The underlying though behind the author's assertion is that the growing popularity of skate users in plaza has resulted in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. While the concerns presented by the author is plausible but it needs more support to materialize. There are many more things to be looked for before we make such conclusion.
Firstly, the author presents a fact that over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing and states that this is mainly due to the growing popularity in skateboard users and the increase in litter and vandalism as a result of growing number of skateboard users in the plaza. There can be many reason to why the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been decreasing over the years. The author has not fully analyzed all the possibilities resulting the decline in number of shoppers. It might be that there has been new facilities build in the neighborhood competing with new plaza. These facilities might have provided shoppers with attractive offers due to which the previous Central Plaza shoppers now regularly shop in those facilities. May be the shopping experience in other facilities is better and this is the reason why shoppers prefer these facilities over the Central Plaza. These all factors must be taken into account to find out exact cause of the decline in number of customers.
Secondly, the author states that growing popularity of skateboarding has is somewhat related to the decrease in number of shoppers in Central Plaza. However, the author has no any evidence to prove that it is the cause in decline of shoppers. In contrast, the increasing popularity of skateboarding might have actually caused more shopkeepers to visit the Central Plaza, but the recovery of previous shoppers has been low in the plaza, that is why there is overall decrease in shoppers. If a place is so popular so something and so many people visit it, it should be a plus point for the Central Plaza. The number of skateboard buyers must have definitely increased in the plaza. However, there might be others reasons that are keeping the once visited customers from visiting again. May be the new staffs in the plaza are not that good to the customers. These all questions should be answered to confirm that the rise in skateboard popularity has actually resulted in decline in shoppers.
Thirdly, the author asserts that there has been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter & vandalism throughout the plaza. However, there is no concrete evidence to support that this has been caused due to the increase in skateboard user in the plaza. There can be a number of reasons to why litters and vandalism has increased in the plaza and many questions that needs to be answered. For example, there might have been no proper maintenance and cleanliness facility as before in the plaza as a result of decrease in sales. There will always be litter where there is crowd but it is the responsibility of the plaza to maintain cleanliness. Moreover, there might not be proper litter disposal in place in the plaza as it was before two years. These all things might account to increase in litter. Talking about vandalism, it can be that there is rise in such cases because there s no proper security in the Plaza. Or the local police is not that active in that reason so the people are less scared to committing crimes. These factors can also be the cause in increasing vandalism which the author has overlooked.
In sum, it can be that the increased litter and vandalism can be the cause decreasing the number of shoppers in the Central Plaza, but the author needs to properly investigate whether this is the only cause. Moreover, the author also needs to justify that these are solely caused by the increase in number of skateboard users.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 679 350
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 31 15
No. of Words: 679 350
No. of Characters: 3238 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.105 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.769 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.57 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 231 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 163 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 119 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.903 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.719 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.677 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.339 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 174, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... high. The underlying though behind the authors assertion is that the growing popularit...
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Line 2, column 334, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'many reasons'.
Suggestion: many reasons
...eboard users in the plaza. There can be many reason to why the number of shoppers in Centra...
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Line 2, column 791, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...regularly shop in those facilities. May be the shopping experience in other facili...
^^
Line 3, column 173, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... Central Plaza. However, the author has no any evidence to prove that it is the ca...
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Line 3, column 788, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...ited customers from visiting again. May be the new staffs in the plaza are not tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, for example, in contrast, talking about, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 48.0 19.6327345309 244% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 101.0 55.5748502994 182% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3295.0 2260.96107784 146% => OK
No of words: 679.0 441.139720559 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85272459499 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.10466731938 4.56307096286 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63467322977 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.328424153166 0.468620217663 70% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1043.1 705.55239521 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 19.7664670659 157% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.933880961 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.290322581 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9032258065 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41935483871 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 8.20758483034 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395332315477 0.218282227539 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125697632628 0.0743258471296 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11581461884 0.0701772020484 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26073021766 0.128457276422 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.081737350477 0.0628817314937 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 98.500998004 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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