"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author concludes that skateboarding is the issue because of which the central plaza is losing business and people are losing interest in these shops. This argument does not provide any specific evidence to make point cogent. There are several issues with the argument. Also questions should be asked about the central plaza, as these shops were out of business for over two years.
Firstly, The author claims that because of skateboarding business has reduced that means there would have been at least, a few unfortunate cases created by the skateboarder and after only the popularity of the Central Plaza has declined. Author fails to point out any such cases or count of such cases that could illustrate his reason more efficiently. In addition to this, This scenario might be the exact opposite, as people started losing interest in Central Plaza, skateboarders were attracted to this as, it was mostly less crowded.
Secondly, As the author states that over past two years the Central Plaza is less in demand, that indicates there must be some other means by which people of the society are fulfilling there needs. For example, there are might be some new malls or new shopping complex which provide service to the public and help in fulfill their daily needs. This might be one more reason that could raise question on the argument, is the central plaza is capable enough to bring back into business even if the skateboarder's are banned?. The argument fails to consider this possibility, that could challenge the prediction made by the argument.
Lastly, As the author claims, there are increased amount of litter and vandalism through out the plaza, this might be one more reason why individuals are looking for other malls or shopping complex for their needs. as a result there is decreased business in the Central plaza. In order to make the prediction of high business more convincing the author should also include any prospective idea or proposal for fixing the place to attract more people and get high business.
In sum, even though it is understandable that skateboarder might create some issue for the shopper, it is not correct to blame the whole thing on them. There might possibility of competition in the market that could have decreased the popularity of the Central Plaza. The author should include such possibilities before predicting or hoping the high business in the central plaza.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 402 350
No. of Characters: 1971 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.478 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.903 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.49 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.062 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.582 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 274, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e are several issues with the argument. Also questions should be asked about the cen...
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Line 13, column 82, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...ncreased amount of litter and vandalism through out the plaza, this might be one more reaso...
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Line 13, column 138, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...plaza, this might be one more reason why individuals are looking for other malls ...
^^
Line 13, column 217, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...ls or shopping complex for their needs. as a result there is decreased business in...
^^
Line 13, column 217, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “as” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ls or shopping complex for their needs. as a result there is decreased business in...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, at least, for example, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2029.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 402.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04726368159 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54166172136 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452736318408 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7334830179 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.352941176 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6470588235 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41176470588 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259773975588 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105911166071 0.0743258471296 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104064940667 0.0701772020484 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165010887127 0.128457276422 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333376013489 0.0628817314937 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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