Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned with the station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, several local businesses that used to run advertisements during our late-night news program have just cancelled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand the coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs.
the author of this argument contends that because of some changes in their late night news program the viewer become unstatisfied and complain more than before. To support the author mentions that the local business owner cancealed their advertisement. Therefore, the author recommends that they have to allocate more time to weather and local news like before to attract viewers and dvertisment. I find this recommendation logically unconvincing because it rests on some permises to support of which there is not sufficient evidence.
The first problem of this arguments is that the author unfairly refers to the complains that received from viewers, however, the author does not indicate how many people sent complaints. As you know, in the research the greater the number of participants the valid and reliable findings are. Therefore, it is entirely possible that the number of complaints that the TV received was not significant. In addition, the author have to provide firm and sufficient evidence to prove that the number of people who complained about this specific situation is significant and totally how many people sent review to the TV station. Furthermore, in the research the findings can be generalized to the concern population and representative of the sample society on terms of the age, gender, social calsses and culture, however, the author does not prvide firm and sufficient evidence that the people who complains are in the same age or are they have the same social classes. It is entirelly possible that the people who sent the complaints are mostly woman who listen to the news in the day more than men and they do not like these changes. Or maybe because the number of women viewer in more that men viewer they donot enjoy the advertise that related to the products such as car and men producs.
Hence, to strengthen the recommendation the author have to consider these possibilities and prepare more evidence to prove his point.
The second problem of this recommendation is that the author illogically assumes that there is a corralation between the number of cancealed advertisments and the changes in their program. The corraltion alone amounts to scant o evidence to claimed cause and effect relationship. Maybe the local business owners decide to cancel their advertisements for other reasons that are absent in these particular situation. It is entirely possible that the price of advertisements in the late night news increase suddenly and the business owner decided to cancel their advertisement. Or perhaps, they the most of the advertisement are about the children toy and products and because this program does not have a large number of children viewer, they have to cancel their advertisement. Hence, without ruling out these possibilities the author cannot convince me that these two factors have correlation with each other.
Finally, the author unfairly assumes that anything changes with passing a time. The author overlooks the fact the thing might change over the past year. It is entirely possible that other late night shows become compatitor of this late night news.
To sum, To strengthen, the author have to provide more sufficient and firm evidence to prove that devoting more time to coverage the local and weather news can improve their revenue.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: the author of this argument contends that because of some changes in their late night news program the viewer become unstatisfied and complain more than before.
Error: unstatisfied Suggestion: unsatisfied
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: To support the author mentions that the local business owner cancealed their advertisement.
Error: cancealed Suggestion: concealed
Sentence: Therefore, the author recommends that they have to allocate more time to weather and local news like before to attract viewers and dvertisment.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: dvertisment Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: I find this recommendation logically unconvincing because it rests on some permises to support of which there is not sufficient evidence.
Error: permises Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Furthermore, in the research the findings can be generalized to the concern population and representative of the sample society on terms of the age, gender, social calsses and culture, however, the author does not prvide firm and sufficient evidence that the people who complains are in the same age or are they have the same social classes.
Error: prvide Suggestion: pride
Error: calsses Suggestion: classes
Sentence: It is entirelly possible that the people who sent the complaints are mostly woman who listen to the news in the day more than men and they do not like these changes.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: entirelly Suggestion: entirely
Sentence: Or maybe because the number of women viewer in more that men viewer they donot enjoy the advertise that related to the products such as car and men producs.
Error: producs Suggestion: produce
Error: donot Suggestion: don
Sentence: The second problem of this recommendation is that the author illogically assumes that there is a corralation between the number of cancealed advertisments and the changes in their program.
Error: cancealed Suggestion: concealed
Error: advertisments Suggestion: advertisements
Error: corralation Suggestion: correlation
Sentence: The corraltion alone amounts to scant o evidence to claimed cause and effect relationship.
Error: corraltion Suggestion: correction
Sentence: It is entirely possible that other late night shows become compatitor of this late night news.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: compatitor Suggestion: competitor
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argument 1 -- not exactly and too long
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- more content wanted to argue against the conclusion:
Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand the coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 537 350
No. of Characters: 2720 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.814 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.065 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.714 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 199 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 147 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.409 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.116 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.515 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
the author of this argument contends that b...
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Line 4, column 22, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ent evidence. The first problem of this arguments is that the author unfairly r...
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Line 4, column 713, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eneralized to the concern population and representative of the sample society on ...
^^
Line 4, column 1217, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...n more that men viewer they donot enjoy the advertise that related to the products such as ca...
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Line 8, column 241, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ion alone amounts to scant o evidence to claimed cause and effect relationship. M...
^^
Line 8, column 703, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... and because this program does not have a large number of children viewer, they have to cancel th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, second, so, then, therefore, in addition, such as, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 11.1786427146 197% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 28.8173652695 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2786.0 2260.96107784 123% => OK
No of words: 537.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18808193669 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78881950412 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.418994413408 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 873.9 705.55239521 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4624800214 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.636363636 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4090909091 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.40909090909 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207606734951 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681194060111 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687655474474 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132113518502 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751994733805 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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