The author in the argument concludes that the business manager of TV station should expand and widen the coverage of weather and local news program in order to enhance and attract more viewers to news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising losses. The author’s argument is based on that when management or late night news program devoted more time to covering national news while less time to covering weather news , in that period major complaints were received from customers and viewers. Moreover, some local businesses that used to run advertisements during that period just cancelled their contracts. The argument possess several flaws in it.
Firstly, the author assumes that when program gave more time to cover national news and less time to cover weather news, viewers complained mostly in that period. However, it may a case that viewers were unwilling and hesitant to complain to TV manager . Also , viewers in past year had dearth or paucity of social or communication sources such as mobile phones, emails, sms services, etc so that they could not able to complain to TV manager but in year later they had sufficient sources to file their complaint. I addition, it may be possibility that farmer who were most concerned about weather news are increased as compare to that of last year or they bought more TV sources that last year,hence, they filed more complaints regarding less time devoted to weather news.
Secondly, the author assumes that several local businesses had just cancelled their contracts who used to run advertisement programes. And from that illogically made conclusion manager should expand coverage of local news. It may be a possibility that program had given sufficient time to local and weather news but other players in the market increased in that period who attracted that local businesses from furnishing more money and incentives and schemes than TV manager as money is the only motivating factor for all people. Also, others local and weather news might covered less time than this TV manager, but enviornment was good as compare to that TV manager and hence they might broke partnership.
In summary, the author in the argument could strengthen his argument by proving example with logical assumptions such as other player in the market, why did local businesses broke partnership with TV manager, social medias availability in that period through which complaint could be submitted, viewers availability for weather and national news in year later and former, relation between local businesses and time devoted to nation news and weather, etc. I believe that if the author in the argument includes this details, statistics and data of survey, it will definitely make assumption and argument both good sounding and cogent.
Essay evaluation report
samples:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 452 350
No. of Characters: 2287 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.611 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.06 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.533 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.637 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.4 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.573 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 322, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rgument is based on that when management or late night news program devoted more ...
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Line 1, column 435, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...while less time to covering weather news , in that period major complaints were re...
^^
Line 1, column 521, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed from customers and viewers. Moreover, some local businesses that used to run a...
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Line 1, column 641, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'possesses'.
Suggestion: possesses
...cancelled their contracts. The argument possess several flaws in it. Firstly, the au...
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Line 3, column 253, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...g and hesitant to complain to TV manager . Also , viewers in past year had dearth ...
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Line 3, column 260, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...esitant to complain to TV manager . Also , viewers in past year had dearth or pauc...
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Line 3, column 695, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , hence
...ey bought more TV sources that last year,hence, they filed more complaints regarding l...
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Line 5, column 549, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...actor for all people. Also, others local and weather news might covered less time...
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Line 7, column 406, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ormer, relation between local businesses and time devoted to nation news and weat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, while, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 11.1786427146 242% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 26.0 13.6137724551 191% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2340.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 451.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18847006652 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64099763738 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463414634146 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 104.744587313 57.8364921388 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.142857143 119.503703932 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2142857143 23.324526521 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 5.70786347227 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.484531750001 0.218282227539 222% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.181942814773 0.0743258471296 245% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.179558776239 0.0701772020484 256% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.319967810667 0.128457276422 249% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114512638965 0.0628817314937 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 14.3799401198 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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