For the past year as part of an effort to broaden our supporter base our Folk on the Air program has allocated less time to traditional American folk music and more time to Latino music and world music In recent months many long term supporters of our sta | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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For the past year, as part of an effort to broaden our supporter base, our Folk on the Air program has allocated less time to traditional American folk music and more time to Latino music and world music. In recent months, many long-term supporters of our station have written to complain about what they describe as the un-American bias of the program. ln addition, the local newspaper has published a recent editorial critical of our shift in programming. Therefore, in order to forestall any further adverse publicity for the station and to avoid the loss of additional listener-supporters, we should discontinue our current emphasis on Latino and world music and restore the time devoted to traditional American folk music to its former level.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The conclusion made by the business manager of a listener supported public radio station are highly unpragmatic as well as imbecile.It is rifed with holes and assumptions ,thus not so robust enough make a such a recommendation.There are myriad exploration as well as multiple areas which are need to be highlighted to make the claims .
For instance being a listener supported public radio,the region where it is forecasting its music and shows is not illustrated .The kind of racial,ethnic ratio of the region is left unknown and leads to question that whether all the listeners are felt that the sudden exponential drift from folk to latino and world music was considered as "un-American " lead to the way of being bias.There are no surveys or charts or any kind of educational reports presented stating that all supporters were against the change in the program..The local newspaper which made a critical editorial on the drastic changes are not the reasons which can cause to make such drastic changes in the public radio station which would eventually mean that it would lose its extended supporter base which was the whole aim.
Instead of going back to the standard of playing only traditional American folk music ,the more pragmatic solution would have been to give equal amount of time to all genre that way it would have been a win-win situation.There are baseless assumptions made thinking playing the traditional American folk music would mean to be that its unbiased ,which is rather the other way round.
In nutshell,it is highly filled with error and retains poor evidence and support in the claims.There are no before and after real evaluations as well there are many questions left unanswered,Therefore it is really not wise enough to casually assume or come down to conclusion without thorough evidence.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, really, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, kind of, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 301.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10631229236 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03622884249 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564784053156 0.468620217663 121% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 19.7664670659 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 75.0 22.8473053892 328% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 204.439936167 57.8364921388 353% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 384.25 119.503703932 322% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 75.25 23.324526521 323% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.0 5.70786347227 315% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 24.0 5.25449101796 457% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167304831382 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884846098781 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599601485995 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0884846098781 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599601485995 0.0628817314937 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 40.3 14.3799401198 280% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -4.65 48.3550499002 -10% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.1628742515 222% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 32.5 12.197005988 266% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.54 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.08 8.32208582834 133% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 12.3882235529 238% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 32.0 11.1389221557 287% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 11.9071856287 252% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, really, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, kind of, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments