"For the past year, as part of an effort to broaden our supporter base, our Folk on the Air program has allocated less time to traditional American folk music and more time to Latino music and world music. In recent months, many long-term supporters of our station have written to complain about what they describe as the un-American bias of the program. In addition, the local newspaper has published a recent editorial critical to our shift in programming. Therefore, in order to forestall any further adverse publicity for the station and to avoid the loss of additional listener-supporters, we should discontinue our current emphasis on Latino and world music and restore the time devoted to traditional American folk music to its former level."
Recently with the change in the allocation of the time towards tradional american folk music and more focus towards latino music and world music, many followers and local newspaper has strongly critized the station. In addition to that some supporters have even named the station as un-american bias of the program. Therefore, to meet the public demand, the station has decided to focus back to the traditional amercican folk song inorder to prevent the further loss of their supporters. Although the station was probably correct about the critics of their program, they are to quick to assume that they will lose further supporters: they have failed to assume that a large portion of population beyond american and the views of other growing supporters.
The station that implies that all of their supporters are against the decision of playing latino music and world music and giving less time to tradional amercian music. however, along with this assumption there is a presumption that a large population outside america have been loving there music and it might benifit them in the long run. Perhaps the ones that have written complain may be their opponents that want them to back off from latino music. Clearly music is a piece of art and it doesnot have any language. further the station assumes that the news posted in the local newspaper give the clear view of the supporters that have critized the station. however, just being a local newspaper, the news may not be as relaible as possible. there are many papers that posts fake news just for publicity rather knowing the full truthness towards it.
america is a huge country with different culture and tradions, including latino american. Inspite of the huge latino american population present in the United states, it would be far too quick to assume that such music will decrease supporters. For example, it would be best for the station if they focus equally on both traditional and latino music rather reducing the time for latino music only. if the station would focus equal time on both music, their supporters are sure to rise.
many specifics should be studied before the final decision is made. The station should not assume that all supporters are in their opposition towards their decision. they must give equal time to both forms of music and study much in detail regarding the effectiveness and authencity of the local papers. only by doing so they can get the true response of their supporters and decide their decision in the days to come.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 424 350
No. of Characters: 2058 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.538 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.854 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.337 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.861 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.413 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.618 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.142 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 577, Rule ID: TO_TOO[5]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
... the critics of their program, they are to quick to assume that they will lose fur...
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Line 5, column 170, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
... less time to tradional amercian music. however, along with this assumption there is a ...
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Line 5, column 235, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...assumption there is a presumption that a large population outside america have be...
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Line 5, column 275, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... large population outside america have been loving there music and it might benifit them i...
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Line 5, column 521, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Further
...f art and it doesnot have any language. further the station assumes that the news poste...
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Line 5, column 663, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...porters that have critized the station. however, just being a local newspaper, the news...
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Line 5, column 747, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...ews may not be as relaible as possible. there are many papers that posts fake news ju...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: America
...ing the full truthness towards it. america is a huge country with different cultur...
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Line 9, column 399, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...educing the time for latino music only. if the station would focus equal time on b...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Many
...their supporters are sure to rise. many specifics should be studied before the ...
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Line 13, column 167, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...heir opposition towards their decision. they must give equal time to both forms of m...
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Line 13, column 305, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Only
...ess and authencity of the local papers. only by doing so they can get the true respo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, regarding, so, then, therefore, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2107.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 424.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96933962264 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40613087334 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464622641509 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6879541712 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.894736842 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3157894737 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89473684211 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303126591193 0.218282227539 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101639361041 0.0743258471296 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0969185639282 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196647903474 0.128457276422 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588338533647 0.0628817314937 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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