photographers color demand
The author’s argument that photographers working in color have an advantage over photographers working in black and white is flawed. In the argument, the author not only draws a conclusion based on vague and ambiguous terms, but also uses data from a limited sample to make a sweeping generalization about an entire population. Furthermore, the author makes the mistake of focusing solely on demand for color photographs while ignoring the supply of photographers working in color.
First, the author concludes that there is a higher demand for color photographs considering the demand for color photographs in limited samples like magazines, newspapers and portrait studios. The underlying assumption is that the sample data represents the entire market of color photographs. The is flawed because he considers only three consumers of color photographs when many others exist and the sample data may not represent the entire demand for color photographs. Since the author does not provide the information regarding the statistics of all the color photograph consumers, it is impossible to determine whether the demand for color photographs is higher than that of black and white photographs as the author concludes.
Second, the author concludes based on various vague or ambiguous words like success, many and more that have varied meanings leading to different interpretations. For example, success can mean monitory success or artistic success for which the author does not explain the meaning. If the success means monitory success, color photographers might have an advantage over the black and white photographers whereas, if the success means artistic success, it would be vice versa. So the author’s conclusion based on the assumption that success means monitory success is unwarranted. Also, the author does not mention the exact number of types of color films while comparing them with the number of black and white films but instead used the word more which is ambiguous. If there are 2000 types of black and white films and 2001 color films, concluding the higher demand for color photographers is flawed. The author makes a similar comparison while comparing the number of newspapers and magazines starting to use color photographs. Since the author does not provide exact statistics while comparing the data, it is not correct to firmly conclude that color photographs are in higher demand.
Third, the conclusion is based mainly on the perception that demand for color photographers is higher than the demand for black and white photographers, and the author spends much time trying to demonstrate this. In doing so, the author fails to consider or establish the number of photographers working either in color or in black and white. The underlying assumption is that the supply of photographers working in either field is irrelevant, when this assumption is unwarranted. If there already exists a large number of photographers working in color, then it might not be advantageous to work in color. On the other hand, if the supply of photographers working in black and white is significantly low, then it would be beneficial to work in black and white even if the demand for black and white photographs is lower than the demand for color photographs. Since the author does not provide any information regarding the supply of photographers working in color or in black and white, it is impossible to determine whether working in color is advantageous as the author concludes.
The argument could be strengthened if the author provided information regarding the supply of photographers working in color and in black and white. The argument could be further strengthened if the author were to define key terms as well as establish a demand for color photographs beyond that of two publishers. As it stands, however, the argument is flawed for the reasons indicated.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: working
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Suggestion: working
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, third, well, whereas, while, for example, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 11.1786427146 242% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3279.0 2260.96107784 145% => OK
No of words: 622.0 441.139720559 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27170418006 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.99398916966 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98209149715 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.337620578778 0.468620217663 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1001.7 705.55239521 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 2.70958083832 369% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9237744045 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.625 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9166666667 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.20833333333 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.503941895224 0.218282227539 231% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.21924375097 0.0743258471296 295% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.167042712476 0.0701772020484 238% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.380956125481 0.128457276422 297% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115621516151 0.0628817314937 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.3799401198 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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