Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Speaker argues that the Pirouettes Ballet school is a sure shot choice for any child. The speaker may be implying the child in the previous sentence is the one who is interested in pursuing a career in dancing. And also mentioned that mentors and teachers have performed with many professional ballet companies, intending their impeccable work experience. Along with that speaker is also mentioning that many students from pirouettes schools have gone on to join top dance companies. Yet, I urge to correct the argument regarding pirouettes school to be the probabilistic rather clear choice.
Referring any student to any particular school which even may be having a record of cent percent successes also doesn't become a clear choice. It's the data it drives the conclusion, showing the single side of the coin and deriving judgments can't prudent of anyone's behavior. The Speaker fails to inform alternative or otherwise in the argument specified above. Each student has an individual goal or perspective, all students joining any particular school will not aim for any particular bullseye. For example, all students joining high school and learning science will not aim to become scientists, some chooses engineering, teaching, etc. Similarly, here, the speaker never mentioned the otherwise in order to educate all wider applications on learning this particular course.
On the brighter side, any student with a cognitive mind figures out their destination in the process of developing skills, i.e., by skills exposure to a different set of data is appended, which results in a myriad of possibilities in the way of thinking. Also as the speaker mentioned, with the assistance of brilliant faculty and management, arduous upholding from the parent's side will assist each and every child. Yet, reaching the target mostly depends upon the effort particular student tends to invest in their growth.
In sum, I concede with the argument until and unless the speaker won't fail to limelight all advanced possibilities possible in taking this course as the next step of any child's career. As many say, the noble deed of any individual will always have the support of many people and bravery. Because, luck always favors the brave ones, yet in unlucky times they remain brave.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 370 350
No. of Characters: 1871 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.386 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.057 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.676 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.922 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 497, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'correcting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'urge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: correcting
...o join top dance companies. Yet, I urge to correct the argument regarding pirouettes schoo...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 113, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...a record of cent percent successes also doesnt become a clear choice. Its the data it ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...sses also doesnt become a clear choice. Its the data it drives the conclusion, show...
^^^
Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...side of the coin and deriving judgments cant prudent of anyones behavior. The Speake...
^^^^
Line 3, column 613, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to engineer'.
Suggestion: to engineer
... aim to become scientists, some chooses engineering, teaching, etc. Similarly, here, the sp...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'skills'' or 'skill's'?
Suggestion: skills'; skill's
... process of developing skills, i.e., by skills exposure to a different set of data is ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 256, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...f possibilities in the way of thinking. Also as the speaker mentioned, with the assi...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, regarding, similarly, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1913.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 367.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21253405995 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73544241484 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564032697548 0.468620217663 120% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4403101511 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.529411765 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.05882352941 5.70786347227 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28880076214 0.218282227539 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896614574841 0.0743258471296 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810763861128 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158215501437 0.128457276422 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0937460105812 0.0628817314937 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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