Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have

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Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.

On careful analysis of the given information, we can find many loopholes in the proposed argument.

First, clear information is not given about the requirements for admission in the proposed ballet school like the minimum or maximum admission age or even the fee structure. So it is clearly not possible to say that it is the right choice for 'any child'.

Second, there is no information given on how the school's dance program has been deemed the most intensive.Complete information should be provided regarding the parameters that were considered to declare the program 'the most intensive'. Because it is possible that the parameters the school things are appropriate for comparison might not be appropriate for a child.

Third, though their teachers have danced in most of the prestigious ballet companies around the world, this does not tell us much about their teaching skills but only that they themselves are very good dancers. Teaching is a art in itself , so before enrolling any child in this school, proper information should be gathered by the interested parents about the teaching culture at the school.

Fourth, though it says that many of their students have gone on to become professional dancers, we do not know for sure that the school was the sole reason for its success. It is possible that these students were taking additional lessons elsewhere or even that some of them where enrolled only for a few months before becoming a professional dancer. Information should be gathered about the background of these students along with their testimonials on how the school helped them in achieving success before we come to a conclusion.

Hence proper analysis and survey needs to be gathered before we can come at a concrete conclusion regarding Pirouettes Ballet School's suitability.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Complete
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
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...ood dancers. Teaching is a art in itself , so before enrolling any child in this s...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, regarding, second, so, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1517.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 294.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15986394558 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85725915961 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534013605442 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.719050446 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.909090909 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7272727273 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290164828995 0.218282227539 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105295556752 0.0743258471296 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512711115415 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132975597191 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05998316811 0.0628817314937 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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