Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Pirouettes Ballet School might come to a parent's mind for sending their child for Dance classes, but is it the best choice they can have or afford. The school alumni might have gone to become professional dancers with top companies but is it just because of the school teaching or they were already talented.
The decision to select school may depend on various factors and once can't argue over the best. As stated the school has most intensive program, so would it be comfortable for every children to go through it and excel in that. One might just want to learn the basics and may be joining as a hobby, so option of this intensive program may not be the best deal for him/her. Pirouettes Ballet School might not be the only option for the children in Elmtown and without knowing the cost of the program we can't declare it as the best and clear choice for any child. As provided the school has teachers who have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies, one can make a judgement that the fees for the school may not be on the lower side and thus raise a question - can everyone afford that.
The teachers of Pirouettes Ballet School have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world, but are they alumni of that same school? We don't know whether these teachers learned in some different ballet school in Elmtown or did they come from some other town or city. Obviously one will be happy to learn from the best and if Pirouettes can provide them with teachers who have excelled in their field, can we neglect the other teachers in different school who might also have performed all over the world and may not have that intensive program one is looking out for.
Saying that we still can't neglect the fact that many of the students of Pirouettes have gone to become professional dancers with top dance companies. So if a child is looking out for Ballet as a career option, they can indulge in their program and learn from the best. As school provides one of the mist intensive program one can go through all the difficulties and if they can surpass them they can achieve much better results than other children. The teachers who have an experience of performing all over the world will motivate children to learn this seriously and they can improve on their shortcomings by taking help of these teachers.
So if a child who is looking out for ballet as just a hobby and want to learn the basics and may not afford the expensive classes may lookout for other options in Elmtown. On the other hand, if a child want to learn from the bests and is ready to go through intensive program to improve and excel they can indulge in Pirouettes Ballet School who has such a good reputation as it's former students have gone to become professionals in the dance companies all over the world.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 508 350
No. of Characters: 2280 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.748 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.488 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.298 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.207 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.812 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.418 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.617 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.211 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 49, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es Ballet School might come to a parents mind for sending their child for Dance c...
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Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... may depend on various factors and once cant argue over the best. As stated the scho...
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Line 3, column 501, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...hout knowing the cost of the program we cant declare it as the best and clear choice...
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Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...are they alumni of that same school? We dont know whether these teachers learned in ...
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Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...oking out for. Saying that we still cant neglect the fact that many of the stude...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mings by taking help of these teachers. So if a child who is looking out for bal...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ready to go through intensive program to improve and excel they can indulge in Pi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, so, still, thus, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.9520958084 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 11.1786427146 197% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2314.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 506.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57312252964 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33328248088 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.373517786561 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.8121562146 57.8364921388 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.625 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.625 23.324526521 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450514328702 0.218282227539 206% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.188680856225 0.0743258471296 254% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134820869885 0.0701772020484 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.304701345954 0.128457276422 237% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0706962154741 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 48.3550499002 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.82 12.5979740519 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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