A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
Nepal and United States are two of the oldest countries in the world and they have two complete different cultural history. Nepal being famous for old way treatments to the problem and wheres US seeks a scientific solution to it. We all know, tooth decay can be a big problem for any individual and may lead eventually to a tooth loss and thus this problem can be seen from two different perspectives in these two countries.
As mentioned the children in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children in United States and their can be numerous factors behind that call.One making a statement saying regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay may be presumptuous. The tooth decay are caused due to snacking, bacteria and eating lots of sweet items. The children in Nepal may not be accessible to the same amount and different types of snacks and deserts as the children in United States. Nepal is a very small country and they do not have as good economy as US, which has Wall mart and other grocery stores on the each corner of the road. Thus the people in US spends a lot on their food and try different cuisines. On the other hand, children of Nepal are deceived of these assets and thus they do not have many options for snacks and sweets, and their economy doesn't offer a luxurious life to a each family.
Nepal and US are in two different regions of a world map. Nepal being famous for their household remedies and solutions to the problems whereas US doesn't have a such luxury, US has advanced in technology and seeking solutions using medicines and drugs which are way more costlier and may not be that effective. The people in Nepal seek the solution by using these homemade remedies which are proven to be effective and thus they do not seek a professional care. This luxury being absent in US leaves an individual with no option other than seeking a dentist and getting a treatment. The fact that a person in United states see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year is majorly due to this reason.
Regular dental care helps an individual with to seek the progress and to get the best status of their well being and thus they visit their dentists regularly. Tooth decay is a long treatment process and needs a regular checkup in order to finish it from the root level, and the regular visits to a dentist is the only solution in United States which people have. The people in Nepal have very few professional dental cares and thus they can't visit them regularly and get the status of their problem. The tooth decay being caused majorly due to irregular eating and not taking proper care of them can be seen as the major cause of more regular dental visits in US as the people there divulge themselves into these habits. The children in Nepal brushes their teeth via naturally made pastes which are more efficient then the synthetic one's made in US probably.
So if a person visit a dental care regularly doesn't prove that the dental institution is not able to solve the problem. There can be various other factors which leads to a tooth decay problem and they should be noted down before making this judgement.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK. maybe people see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year not for teeth decay.
argument 3 -- not OK or duplicated to argument 1
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 569 350
No. of Characters: 2555 1500
No. of Different Words: 234 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.884 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.49 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.282 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.095 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.133 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.524 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.161 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: where's
...r old way treatments to the problem and wheres US seeks a scientific solution to it. W...
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Suggestion: One
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Line 3, column 638, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Line 3, column 861, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
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Suggestion: an
...conomy doesnt offer a luxurious life to a each family. Nepal and US are in two...
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Line 5, column 148, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: doesn't
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Line 5, column 267, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'costlier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: costlier
...using medicines and drugs which are way more costlier and may not be that effective. The peop...
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Line 5, column 443, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...be effective and thus they do not seek a professional care. This luxury being abs...
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Line 7, column 438, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...professional dental cares and thus they cant visit them regularly and get the status...
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Line 7, column 722, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
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...e divulge themselves into these habits. The children in Nepal brushes their teeth v...
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Line 7, column 815, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...ly made pastes which are more efficient then the synthetic ones made in US probably....
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Line 9, column 46, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: doesn't
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Line 9, column 67, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...tal care regularly doesnt prove that the dental institution is not able to solve ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, then, thus, well, whereas, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 11.1786427146 268% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2597.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 565.0 441.139720559 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59646017699 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87542086881 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32897354757 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.414159292035 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 810.0 705.55239521 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0892373291 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.666666667 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9047619048 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 5.70786347227 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182139470484 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690585012923 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564282133271 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109349671102 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070696800157 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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