Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Arts and military are two opposite and biggest assets of any country. In order to boost the economy and show their supremacy over others each country invests a lot in them. But is it true that arts get the same status and investments as military? I don't think so, and thus it raises a point that governments of a country should invest their time and money equally for arts as they do in the military.
Art is a sign of peace, where an artist or a group of them present and show their skill sets to design something which spellbind an individual and make the audience appreciate the art. Art speaks for the cultural heredity of a nation. The old monuments and forts were decorated with detailed designs which still looks beautiful and make an audience wonder why there is no such new designs in the society in recent time. Arts make the moments and places cherished with memories and gives a soothing feeling of calmness and peace to an individual . If government invest more in arts, in can provide the employment to the artists and they can earn well and get the recognition they deserve. In each country, the economy is dependent on the employment and if we take the case of France where artistic skills are greatly appreciated, we can see how their GDP has increased. The theaters and streets are filled with artists who earn their income via showcasing their skills and get very low returns. On the other hand, if government start investing in these individuals, the cultural heritage and the beauty of artists talent will still remain.
Art as proved is a big token of economy of the country. India, being a country of old times and full of monuments and temples earns a lot through the tourists who come from different parts of the world to seek calm and get the taste of artistic talents. Approximately 10 percent of the countries growth is dependent on foreign currencies and tourists helps the government in maintaining that. The old canvases and paintings of rulers and their life speaks of the lifestyle they used to live and if we do not preserve these arts we might deceive our future generation of these information. In order to preserve the future and boost the economy of the country, the government should equally invest in arts and the artists talent. Military forces are not the biggest asset of the country and Japan has proved that by appreciating the arts and investing more in it in the recent past and getting the returns in double.
Saying that we cannot neglect the fact that military is the biggest asset of any country. No country is sure of their future and their neighboring countries who can attack them in order to take the throne. However, the governments speak out in open for the peace, they still double the investment and forces in order to be ready for an attack and to show their supremacy over others. So is government ready to ignore this and invest in arts as they should?
The governments of many countries has started to take arts seriously and they are investing a huge amount in that field. The results can be seen in the returns the arts section is providing. It may not speak a lot but the need of the hour is to invest equally in arts and support them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, so, still, thus, well, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 40.0 14.8657303371 269% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2641.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 572.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61713286713 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89045207381 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4727049012 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437062937063 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 806.4 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3003066944 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.64 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.88 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172134591131 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589816700875 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467985988027 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116758847023 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195393966658 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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