Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
The argument delineates a claim by Pirouttes Ballet School that it is the clear choice for any child as it is the best dance school in Elmtown and it has the most intensive dance program and that their teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world and also that most of their students have become professional dancers with top dance companies. While, this seems to be a cogent argument, there are few things that are left uncertain like the total number of students enrolled and the number of students out of them that became professional dancers, the background of students that became professional dancers and if the information provided is based on year wise statistics or not.
A school's success depends upon the percentage of its students that have become successful as if greater number of students show propitious improvements then it implies that the school is putting some effort for the success of their students, else if only a few become successful, it is probably because of their own efforts and such students will become successful irrespective of the school they are enrolled in. Hence, it is vital to state the percentage of students that have become successful.
The argument states that many of its students have become successful dancers but no year wise statistical evidence is provided for this. It is significant as if the successful students are all from one year and rest of the years the students were not that successful then it is probably because of the batch that enrolled that year and not because of the school. In this case, the school cannot claim that they manufacture successful dancers as that one year may be a mere serendipity.
It is not stated in the argument if there is any criteria considered in the enrollment process. This is vital to evaluate the argument as if the school has an eligibility criteria in the enrollment process that allows only adept students then the students showed success because of their own ability and the school will not have much role to play here.
Hence, the above stated points need to be evaluated in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument based on it are reasonable or not.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 377 350
No. of Characters: 1809 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.406 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.798 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.643 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.437 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.45 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.45 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.18 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 3, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...ased on year wise statistics or not. A schools success depends upon the percentage of ...
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Line 4, column 37, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are any criteria'?
Suggestion: there are any criteria
...y. It is not stated in the argument if there is any criteria considered in the enrollment process. T...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 377.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86472148541 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67306368019 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.419098143236 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 573.3 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.8473053892 162% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 115.360348474 57.8364921388 199% => OK
Chars per sentence: 183.4 119.503703932 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.7 23.324526521 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298434153225 0.218282227539 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120021941546 0.0743258471296 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165623864016 0.0701772020484 236% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153470175657 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.146128811353 0.0628817314937 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.3 14.3799401198 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.38 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 12.197005988 135% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 12.3882235529 218% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.1389221557 151% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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