Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child Of all the dance schools in Elmtown Pirouettes has the most intensive program and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world Many of our students have gon | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.

The author of the argument claims that the Pirouettes Ballets School is the clear choice for any child. To support his assertion the author has provided some details about it's teachers and students. However, the argument doesn't provide any solid probes to convince that the Pirouettes Ballet School is the best choice for anyone. The author needs to provide more details to make his argument more concrete.

In the argument the speaker added that the Pirouettes has the most intensive program in compare to all the dance schools in Elmtown. However, this statement is not supported with any proof and no further details have been provided about its program and how that program is different and better than other dance schools' programs. The author mentioned that the Pirouettes schools is good choice for any child but what if the school doesn't have any special program for very young children or as mentioned in the further argument that Pirouettes school has most intensive program but the author needs to answer few questions like does this intensive program provides safety precautions for little children or not, it is provide flexibility for their students or it is too strict, and mainly how it is different and better then other program. To strengthen this argument, the author requires to provide a good comparison of other schools versus Pirouettes school.

The author assumed that the teachers of Pirouettes school have danced in most prestigious ballet companies all over the world means they are good at teaching ballet. However, it is not always true. If somebody is good at dancing then it is possible that she is not good at teaching the same thing as teaching and dance both are different kinds of arts. If the teachers of Pirouettes schools are not good at teaching as compare to their dancing then Pirouettes School for ballet class would be not the best option. In short, the author must provide details of how the teachers of Pirouettes are better at teaching ballet rather than how good they are at dancing.

To support his point the author provided further details about their students that many students have become professional dancers with top dance companies. The author added this statement to support his claim but he doesn't tell us how it it relevant to prove Pirouettes schools is the best choice for any child. As we know, there are many students in the class but some got highest marks, some got average and some fails the exams; therefore, performance of some students do not represent the whole picture of Pirouettes School. Therefore the author needs to provide exact numbers of all students and the students who become professional dancers to bolster his point.

In sum, the argument is based on unwarranted assumptions which are indefensible in nature. Therefore, the author needs to provide further evidence and show that how Pirouettes School is better choice for anyone in compare to other dance schools. By providing answers for above mention questions, the author surely can make this argument more convincing.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: doesn't
...ers and students. However, the argument doesnt provide any solid probes to convince th...
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...ce for any child but what if the school doesnt have any special program for very young...
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Message: Did you mean 'provide'?
Suggestion: provide
...stions like does this intensive program provides safety precautions for little children ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
...tions for little children or not, it is provide flexibility for their students or it is...
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Message: Did you mean 'better than'?
Suggestion: better than
...ict, and mainly how it is different and better then other program. To strengthen this argum...
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
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Message: Did you mean 'providing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: providing
...then this argument, the author requires to provide a good comparison of other schools vers...
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, therefore, in short

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2558.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 508.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03543307087 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47983684931 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.377952755906 0.468620217663 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 759.6 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.4097915981 57.8364921388 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.9 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.35 5.70786347227 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.41463077908 0.218282227539 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151642553874 0.0743258471296 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135228247269 0.0701772020484 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233987551563 0.128457276422 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0881500909686 0.0628817314937 140% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, therefore, in short

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments