A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal re

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A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.

The conclusion in above statement is not validated because of many unanswered questions. It is irrational to conclude that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.

Let us list out the loopholes in the above statement.
Firstly, two poles apart regions are compared with the children in that area. This means that only children are taken into consideration to conclude a practice that may or may not be important for that region. Just by taking a survey with an obscure age group which is not stated, we cannot conclude anything.

Secondly, there is a major fault in the statement, let us take a deep look into it, a suburban area of United States is compared with Himalayan mountain region in Nepal. Nepal is a region where not much facilities are available for the betterment of society. Children are brought up in rural areas where they may be living in arduous conditions of life. People in Nepal may nurture their children as there is no need of any dental treatment. May be parents look after their child in a very meticulous way so to keep them as healthy as possible with minimum requirements. Whereas in the United States may be parents are very lenient with their child and allow them to eat whatever they want to which results in to see a dental care.

In spite of these facts, we cannot conclude the above statement by saying dental care is not helpful, it might be possible that children in Nepal have no need of the same whereas in the United States there is more need. The area of the location also plays into account. The United States is a humungous area as compared to Nepal, comparing the population at the same time is more in the United States to Nepal. No measurement of any analysis might not conclude the following by rationally looking into the number of times people in UnitedStates go for regular dental care than in Nepal.

The region of Nepal is also full of nature, serenity and purity whereas in the United States there are many numbers of states in which some are developed and some are in the country side so we cannot decide which area they are talking about.

Lastly, I conclude that the above statement has many errors that it has not taken into account so it is not validated.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 199, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...n in Nepal. Nepal is a region where not much facilities are available for the better...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, whereas, talking about, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65577889447 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46252306547 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452261306533 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7314110468 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.944444444 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1111111111 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236037303677 0.218282227539 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751476233622 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656985359065 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0873205863597 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741518273412 0.0628817314937 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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