A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
The author of the argument implies that a recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan Mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban area in the United States, well the author is trying to compare two different lifestyles which won’t be similar.
There are many assumptions that can come to our mind when we think about tooth decay and there are many external factors that actually determine the heath of a one’s tooth. For example: Comparing the quality of life, the type of food, habitat, etc. can affect our tooth. The quality of life in United States is quite hectic compared to the people who stay in ranges of Himalayan Mountain.
However, both the children of their respective countries consume different types of food. For example: Children in United States probably might be consuming more chocolates or sweets, pizza, burger, etc. whereas the children in the Himalayan region of Nepal might not be prone to consuming such foods, the mostly might be consuming more numbers of fruits or local food. The type of food we consume is proportional to the quality of the teeth. If children consume more of junk food than healthy food, because of lack of nourishment in the food items it can deteriorate the quality of teeth.
Additionally, the author also implies that people suburban areas of the United States visit dentist 1.25 times a year whereas the people in Nepal little or no professional dental care. This statement made by the author suffice that if we prefer eating healthy food over junk food then we don’t need to consult doctor much. Even if people of Nepal were deprived of professional dentist., the people of Nepal didn’t face much problems compared to what citizens of United States are facing. There might also be an alternative explanation so as to why the people of Nepal have such good quality of teeth.
Looking at one of the most favorable arguments that can come to anyone’s mind have been stated above. This shows that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay but by changing our habits we can prevent tooth decay.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 366 350
No. of Characters: 1729 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.374 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.724 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.365 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.816 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.374 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.641 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.158 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 420, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ntist., the people of Nepal didn’t face much problems compared to what citizens of U...
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Line 7, column 536, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ight also be an alternative explanation so as to why the people of Nepal have such good ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, look, so, then, well, whereas, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 363.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92011019284 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42627638191 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501377410468 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6342221801 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.625 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6875 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1875 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354654693472 0.218282227539 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104609032077 0.0743258471296 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126551136809 0.0701772020484 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209115628869 0.128457276422 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.169976471792 0.0628817314937 270% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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