"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
According to the above passage, the magazine insists company should hire people who sleep less than 6 hours with the support of several grounds. At first glance, these arguments seem to be somewhat convincing, but further reflection reveals that there are many unsubstantiated speculations that hinder the author from developing logical consequence.
First and foremost, mentioning that employees who sleep no more than 6 hours in advertising company is needed to make a higher profit, the magazine presumes that employers should hire people sleeping less. The author implies that another company is in the same condition as the advertising company. However, a variety of company needs specialized strategy individually for their success, not a normalized strategy, because requisites for success are different to each company. The advertising company maybe require a lot of time to accomplish their duties, while the company of internet needs innovative ideas which can be produced regardless of time. Forcing too much work and less sleep can make people ineffective in working in IT company.
Furthermore, the magazine makes an error in putting normal people and executives in the same conditions, exemplifying advertising executives. However, this supposition seems to be far-fetched because executives and normal employees are not imposed to do the same works. The normal workers do not need to stay a long time to carry out their jobs. On the other hand, executives should be always prepared for a mutation of the circumstances of their company. Also, compared to normal workers, they are tasked to conduct significant works which take a lot of times.
Last but not least, citing data of the relationship between profit and company consisted of people who need less than 6 hours of sleep, the magazine believes that amount of sleep and high profit are in causality. This implies that the amount of sleep is the most important cause for making higher earnings. However, this causality seems to be fallacious. According to the study, sleep time and profit are just in correlation, not proved as causality. Also, sleep time is one of the most important elements which produce high earnings, not the only one. To purport this relationship as causality, they should propose a more valid study.
To sum up, the owner may not necessarily be wrong to assert hiring people who sleep less than 6 hours. Though, the assertion of the magazines rests on suspicious assumption which needs more scrutiny to undergird it. To bolster the argument, these investigations should encompass more conclusive evidence that make the above uncertain suppositions lucid.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 422 350
No. of Characters: 2176 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.532 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.156 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.787 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.095 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.761 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.063 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "needs specialized" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'specializing' or 'to be specialized'.
Suggestion: specializing; to be specialized
...ny. However, a variety of company needs specialized strategy individually for their success...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 494, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'companies'.
Suggestion: companies
...ferent to each company. The advertising company maybe require a lot of time to accompli...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 104, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ing people who sleep less than 6 hours. Though, the assertion of the magazines rests o...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, while, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2241.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 422.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31042654028 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86287799142 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504739336493 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0824389741 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.714285714 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0952380952 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19047619048 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193672170259 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587601552798 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411385058693 0.0701772020484 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102846084872 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444323896707 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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