A recent study shows that people living on the continent of North America suffer 9 times more
chronic fatigue and 31 times more chronic depression than do people living on the continent of
Asia. Interestingly, Asians, on average, eat 20 grams of soy per day, whereas North Americans
eat virtually none. It turns out that soy contains phytochemicals called isoflavones, which have
been found to possess disease-preventing properties. Thus, North Americans should consider
eating soy on a regular basis as a way of preventing fatigue and depression.
In the study, the author has stated that the populations on the continents of North America suffered more from chronic fatigue and chronic depression as compared to the population on the continent of Asia. The argument cites that disease preventing compound isoflavone- mitigates these problems in the people of Asia. The author has reached to the conclusion based on the fact that North Americans should eat soy on the regular basis to prevent from such types of defects. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, three questions must be answered.
First of all, are the climatic and other environmental factors of the Asia and North America comparable? It is possible that these parameters were difference in both of these continents- Perhaps, North America have the lower temperature and the physical and mental condition varied upon two geographical location. Futher, the people of North America may take a greater stress while working in the office or any fields. If either of these scenarios has merit, then the conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, the author assumes that problems of depression and fatigue was caused by the lack of phytochemicals isoflavone. The author in this argument prematurely assumes that eating of soy by the people of North America can reduces these problems. The author has not given any evidences about the food habits of the people of North America. Also, there is not any evidences that these problems were occurred by the deficiency of isothiocyanates. However, the people of North America might eat the carrot which contains the same chemical compounds ‘isothiocyanates’.
Thirdly, the author assumes that fatigue and depression are only the symptoms of deficiency of isothiocyanates. Perhaps, it may be the reasons of several factors viz; diet, environmental factors, genetic or hereditary factors. Without observing of different external indicators for the precursor of disease, the argument conclusion of eating soy is indefensible.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumption. If the author is able to answers the three questions above and offer more evidence (perhaps, in the form of systematic research study), then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of proposed recommendation to eat soy on the regular basis in order to mitigate the illness.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 2017 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.239 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.929 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.389 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.603 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.563 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.068 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 225, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'reduce'
Suggestion: reduce
... soy by the people of North America can reduces these problems. The author has not give...
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Line 7, column 155, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'factors'' or 'factor's'?
Suggestion: factors'; factor's
...rhaps, it may be the reasons of several factors viz; diet, environmental factors, genet...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2085.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41558441558 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19512193552 2.78398813304 115% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496103896104 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7925364802 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.833333333 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3888888889 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05555555556 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202006418326 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642762954763 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619276719637 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109964113213 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578634400407 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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