The author the argument attempts to establish a relation between a use of a online media and a peoples healthy and satisfied life. However the author fails to provide a substantiate evidences. The conclusion provided by the author regarding one should limit the time spent online and relation of it with the depression is however unwarranted with sufficient evidences
Firstly, the author mentions only 250 adults in a survey, while the result concluded from a such a small population cannot be generalised to a whole. The smaller the sample population size, higher the erroneous and superflaws in results. Also the purpose of use of internet is highly different among many people. It may be obvious the people get depression with the use of medias like facebooks and they use to live highly monotonous life living inside a confined space in a room of a house. While, some may use the internet in a highly productive way like educational, learning, communication, innovative purposes.
Secondly, the author mentions a age class of 30 to 45 and make a false commensuration in conclusion by generalising the result to whole class of people. What about the remaining people of other age class? Thus, author fails to provide sufficient evidences Also, a result of depression in a 20 % of people out of surveyed population cannot be concluded as a depression is related with online time spent. There may be different issues in their life like a family issues, financial issues, bosses issues in company etc.
Moreover, rathar online media is itself a media to get free from depression. A highly depressed and frustrated person with his workload can find a efficient way to finish work in a internet and may find other recreational videos and movie to regale himself. A solitude student far from home feeling homesickness can easily communicate with his/her friends and his/her family that will make him feel better.
Finally, contrast to the conclusion of the argument, the person who want to improve their well being have many other options with them, not just only by cutting off their time spent online.People can go to travel, movies, sports, swimming, vacation which are far better options to free stress in a people life. He can also surf down the internet to find a way to get rid of depression.
To conclude, the author should have provided more evidences to prove right his/her fact and study. Past datas of the similar studies would also have made a argument plausible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...trast to the conclusion of the argument, the person who want to improve their wel...
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...are far better options to free stress in a people life. He can also surf down the...
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...lso surf down the internet to find a way to get rid of depression. To conclude,...
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...the similar studies would also have made a argument plausible.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2080.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 415.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01204819277 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78318050978 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503614457831 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.7830950563 57.8364921388 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.555555556 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0555555556 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 5.70786347227 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 5.25449101796 495% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0925081092687 0.218282227539 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0265022774954 0.0743258471296 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324959259935 0.0701772020484 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0434369778754 0.128457276422 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256415812368 0.0628817314937 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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