"Recently we signed a contract with The Fly-Away Pest-Control Company to provide pest-control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest-Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff Company for all our pest-control services."
The author contends that a food distribution company have changed the pest control services with the Fly-Away pest control company, but it has been more harmful to the company's finance. Thus, they want to return to the earlier company. In the given author's reasons why they want to return, it seems pretty reasonable, but there are some flaws, so that can't support his assertion.
Firstly, they found that over $20,000 worth of food was destroyed by pest, so they wanted to return. however, we need to know that they gave exact information about the system of the warehouse. what does it mean is that they changed the control company very recently, so it is the very first time for them. The new pest control company can't expect all matters without enough experiences. if the food company gave the enough information to the control company, and the control company made mistakes, it will strengthen the author's assertion. In contrast, the control company didn't have enough time and information, it can't bolster.
Secondly, the author insists that they want to return to the previous company for saving money. The author, however, doesn't give any fact about the total cost. To think about saving money, we need to know the total cost added the money damaged and the price charged by both companies. He/She says that although the price charged by Fly-Away is pretty lower, the best mean of saving money is to return to the previous company. what we can know with the given thing is that Fly-Away company has the lower price than the previous company. if the total cost of Fly-Away is higher than the previous, it can support the author's assumption. but if that is lower, won't.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 292 350
No. of Characters: 1360 1500
No. of Different Words: 125 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.134 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.658 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.199 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 70 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 32 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 14 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.883 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.9 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.461 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.632 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.254 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 354, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...able, but there are some flaws, so that cant support his assertion. Firstly, ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 101, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...oyed by pest, so they wanted to return. however, we need to know that they gave exact i...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 194, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...tion about the system of the warehouse. what does it mean is that they changed the c...
^^^^
Line 5, column 336, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... for them. The new pest control company cant expect all matters without enough exper...
^^^^
Line 5, column 388, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...all matters without enough experiences. if the food company gave the enough inform...
^^
Line 5, column 408, Rule ID: GAVE_GIVE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'give'?
Suggestion: give
...enough experiences. if the food company gave the enough information to the control c...
^^^^
Line 5, column 522, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...y made mistakes, it will strengthen the authors assertion. In contrast, the control com...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 574, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...rtion. In contrast, the control company didnt have enough time and information, it ca...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 617, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...nt have enough time and information, it cant bolster. Secondly, the author in...
^^^^
Line 5, column 617, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...nt have enough time and information, it cant bolster. Secondly, the author in...
^^^^
Line 9, column 119, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... for saving money. The author, however, doesnt give any fact about the total cost. To ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 428, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...y is to return to the previous company. what we can know with the given thing is tha...
^^^^
Line 9, column 538, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... lower price than the previous company. if the total cost of Fly-Away is higher th...
^^
Line 9, column 616, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...r than the previous, it can support the authors assumption. but if that is lower, wont....
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 636, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
... it can support the authors assumption. but if that is lower, wont.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 55.5748502994 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1398.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 288.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85416666667 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31369619963 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 204.123752495 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461805555556 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 705.55239521 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.6587130379 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.375 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9375 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257968755618 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860446530836 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0962033481239 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186921888941 0.128457276422 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726852815546 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.3550499002 145% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.197005988 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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