The following appeared as a letter to the editor from the owner of a skate shop in Central Plaza.
"Two years ago the city council voted to prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. They claimed that skateboard users were responsible for litter and vandalism that were keeping other visitors from coming to the plaza. In the past two years, however, there has been only a small increase in the number of visitors to Central Plaza, and litter and vandalism are still problematic. Skateboarding is permitted in Monroe Park, however, and there is no problem with litter or vandalism there. In order to restore Central Plaza to its former glory, then, we recommend that the city lift its prohibition on skateboarding in the plaza."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Two years ago the city council prohibited skateboarding in central plaza for other visitors. they thought skateboard users made some problem such as litter and vandalism, and that were harmful to other visitors. after that, litter and vandalism has been problematic. Also, skateboarding is permitted in monroe park, but, there is no problem. so, the author asserts that skateboarding is not problem to other visitors for that reasons, so we need to restore central plaza to its former. The reasons that the author suggests sound reasonable, but, there are critical mistakes.
First, the author says that after prohibiting skateboarding in central plaza, there has been only a small increase in the number of visitors, so that is not responsible for the number of visitors. we don't know the reason why the number of visitors increased after that. it might be happened because of prohibiting skateboarding. some people don't want to see skateboarding, and they want to rest or do other things without acitivities noisying. skateboarding might look dangers to some people. so, we need to know why more visitors came to central plaza after that.
Second, the author claims that there are still problems like litter and vandalism, and it means skateboarding is not harmful to visitors. it sounds reasonable, but there is a critical mistake. it is how much litter and vandalism increase or decrease. if there are still problems like litter and vandalism, but that has been decreased, we can think that skateboarding plays a role in litter and vandalism.
Finally, the author says that skateboarding is permitted in monroe park, but, there is no problem with litter or vandalism. Before we look that case, we need to know that there is a difference between central plaza and monroe park. In monroe park, there might be more securities or people for cleaning the park. if they have same things and situation without skateboarding, it can support the author's assertion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ng in central plaza for other visitors. they thought skateboard users made some prob...
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...nd that were harmful to other visitors. after that, litter and vandalism has been pro...
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...umber of visitors increased after that. it might be happened because of prohibitin...
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...thout skateboarding, it can support the authors assertion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, second, so, still, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 321.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16199376947 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85692372653 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 215.323595506 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429906542056 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 493.2 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.498409058 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.85 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.05 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15 5.21951772744 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274040067892 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889004203947 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104713624681 0.0758088955206 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173518922075 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0878667623892 0.0667264976115 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.