The following appeared in a letter to the school board in the town of Centerville.
"All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. Since a number of parents in Centerville have complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. Although there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. Therefore an effective and mandatory program sponsored by the high school is the only solution to this serious problem."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
According to the parent's letter, a number of them contend that some teenagers have involved in several accidents happened in the past two years, so they have to learn how to drive in the school program. because they don't have enough time and money to afford for some reasons. The given assumptions they are insisting seem reasonable, but there are flaws.
Firstly, we need to know the reasons why the accident was happened. what does it mean is that we have to figure that the teenage drivers really made the car accidents. The author didn't articulate specific facts for the accidents. The other car might hit the teenager's car on the road. if the teenager's car was hit by other car, the assumption was wrong. The teenager, however, made the accidents, it will prove his assumptions.
Secondly, the author says that they don't enough time to teach, because they are too busy. Then, we need to think how long teaching teenagers takes. The students can learn in two weeks, we don't need to make a mandatory program for them. And we should look for someone to teach them without the money. we find him, we also don't need to make. In addition, we have to think whether the parents really don't have time for teaching them or not. they can teach in the night after work. if they really don't have enough time, it will support the author's assumptions.
Finally, the author insist that the parents have enough money for the cost of the driving course in the driving school. In this case, we should think which one is cheap between the driving school and making the program in the school. To make the mandatory program, the school need lots of money, because they have new teachers and cars. The school can't give the program to students without money. Although parents pay for the price with other parents together, it might be more expensive than that of the driving school. if the parents really don't have time and the school's tuition is lower than the driving's, it can bolster what the author claims.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 361 350
No. of Characters: 1600 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.359 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.432 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.167 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.562 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.415 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.574 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.205 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...arn how to drive in the school program. because they dont have enough time and money to...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 218, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ive in the school program. because they dont have enough time and money to afford fo...
^^^^
Line 5, column 70, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
... reasons why the accident was happened. what does it mean is that we have to figure ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 181, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ally made the car accidents. The author didnt articulate specific facts for the accid...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teenagers'' or 'teenager's'?
Suggestion: teenagers'; teenager's
... accidents. The other car might hit the teenagers car on the road. if the teenagers car w...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 287, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ight hit the teenagers car on the road. if the teenagers car was hit by other car,...
^^
Line 5, column 294, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teenagers'' or 'teenager's'?
Suggestion: teenagers'; teenager's
...t the teenagers car on the road. if the teenagers car was hit by other car, the assumptio...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 38, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... Secondly, the author says that they dont enough time to teach, because they are ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 190, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...The students can learn in two weeks, we dont need to make a mandatory program for th...
^^^^
Line 9, column 302, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...omeone to teach them without the money. we find him, we also dont need to make. In...
^^
Line 9, column 323, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...without the money. we find him, we also dont need to make. In addition, we have to t...
^^^^
Line 9, column 399, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ave to think whether the parents really dont have time for teaching them or not. th...
^^^^
Line 9, column 441, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...nt have time for teaching them or not. they can teach in the night after work. if t...
^^^^
Line 9, column 481, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...they can teach in the night after work. if they really dont have enough time, it w...
^^
Line 9, column 496, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...in the night after work. if they really dont have enough time, it will support the a...
^^^^
Line 13, column 350, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... have new teachers and cars. The school cant give the program to students without mo...
^^^^
Line 13, column 523, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ensive than that of the driving school. if the parents really dont have time and t...
^^
Line 13, column 545, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e driving school. if the parents really dont have time and the schools tuition is lo...
^^^^
Line 13, column 568, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...e parents really dont have time and the schools tuition is lower than the drivings, it ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, then, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 353.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6940509915 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20471960725 2.78398813304 79% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461756373938 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.0265359843 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.0434782609 119.503703932 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.347826087 23.324526521 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4347826087 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10781403063 0.218282227539 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0348885886986 0.0743258471296 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472234585863 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.073472653688 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558190626331 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 14.3799401198 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 48.3550499002 151% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 12.197005988 56% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.33 12.5979740519 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.71 8.32208582834 81% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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