Claim: Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's major field of study.Reason: Acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
many of people think that students need to learn their's life with a lot of activities from diverse courses in a university. We are living in 21 century, and there are a lot of things to do and experience. it is ture and important to learn many parts in our society. but it is not a main thing for students in universities. because they can preare for their future by developing their's major skills deeply, and get accomplishments by studying hard.
Firstly, students can prepare well for their future by studying their major deeply. The first thing that students have to do in their universities is to make themselves workers who good companies want to employ. Everyone in 21 century know and feel that it is getting hard to get a job. As getting hard to enter a company, students should realize that they need to study their major hard and prepare for their future well as quick as possible. For example, the one of my cousin, Ji hoon, was a student who prepared for his future well in his university. he had many chance to do a lot of activities, however, he felt that almost every companies wanted to employ people trained well. This fact stimulated him to study his major hard and deeply. after 4 years, he got A in almost every courses that he took, and he could get a chance to enter in an one of the biggest firm in my country. if he didn't trained well when he was in his university, he couldn't get the big chance.
Secondly, when students focus to study their major deeply, they can feel a accomplishment, and it stimulate them to study more. what does it mean is that as focusing to study their major, what they learn is getting difficult, and it would spur students to think that they need to study hard. Also, as they study deeply and get a accomplishment, they can get a pride by themselves. For instance, when I was a freshman in my university, I did a lot of activities in diverse courses. I enjoyed meeting many people and doing that. but when I was in a second year, I felt that I was not prepared to study my major. because it was too difficult for me. Eventually, I was looking for easy courses, and stayed away from my major. In third year, I realized that I needed to focus my major, and study really hard. after 3 months, I could learn what I had to study in 1 and 2 years, get accomplishments and confidence for my major. if I didn't feel that things, maybe I would give up my major, and look for other field easy.
To sum up, although students should do and experience from diverse activities, but the main objective of students in universities is to prepare for their future well. Therefore, students can high opportunites for getting a job and get accomplishments and confidences in their life by focusing his major deeply.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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many of people think that students need to l...
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...him to study his major hard and deeply. after 4 years, he got A in almost every cours...
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..., and he could get a chance to enter in an one of the biggest firm in my country. ...
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...plishments and confidence for my major. if I didnt feel that things, maybe I would...
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...ments and confidence for my major. if I didnt feel that things, maybe I would give up...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, well, as to, for example, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 33.0505617978 242% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2262.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 504.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4880952381 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67504397361 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.392857142857 0.4932671777 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.0 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.10617977528 354% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 11.0 1.77640449438 619% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5215114794 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.7777777778 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.48148148148 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 7.80617977528 282% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104817374119 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0379223491063 0.0831039109588 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345008109868 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0863701959387 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273775056342 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 14.1392134831 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 12.1639044944 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.66 8.38706741573 79% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.7820224719 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.