Recently, butter has been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. This change, however, has had little impact on our customers. In fact, only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers do not distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The author asserts that replacing butter by margarine makes customers feel happy, making a profit for some reasons. The reasons he mentioned seem reasonable, but there are some critical mistakes.
he contends that only about 2 percent of customers have complained about the change, it indicates that the rest of them don't care of that, even feel happy. if 100 percent of the customers have voted, and not filed complaint, it can support his assertion strongly. Because customers feel that this change is not bad. but we can't know how many customers have voted. it means we can't know how they feel about the change. so what he says is just his assumption and not reasonable.
The author also mentions the reporting by servers as a indicator what the customer thought about the change. he says that many of customers who ask for butter don't complain when they are given margarine instead of the butter. if they recongnized the change, and felt happy with that, it can enhance his assertion.
In the author's assertion, however, we can't know that, even he says that the customers can't distinguish butter from margarine. In this regard, a number of customers couldn't notice the change, and just ate their foods with margarine, believing they were eating the butter. so it can't be supporting his assertion well.
he also assert that as the restaurant use margarine, they can save extra-money and make a profit. if the restaurant announce the change to all of the customers, and they accept it, it would be a good way for profit to the restaurant. but they use the margarine for just some profit, deceiving customers. they didn't make the price of the foods lower. so the author's assertion is not a right way for the restaurant's finance.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 302 350
No. of Characters: 1404 1500
No. of Different Words: 129 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.169 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.649 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.482 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 95 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.37 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.492 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.824 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.344 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 2, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...here are some critical mistakes. he contends that only about 2 percent of c...
^^
Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...nge, it indicates that the rest of them dont care of that, even feel happy. if 100 p...
^^^^
Line 5, column 158, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...hem dont care of that, even feel happy. if 100 percent of the customers have voted...
^^
Line 5, column 266, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... it can support his assertion strongly. Because customers feel that this change is not ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 318, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...omers feel that this change is not bad. but we cant know how many customers have vo...
^^^
Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...eel that this change is not bad. but we cant know how many customers have voted. it ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 366, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ant know how many customers have voted. it means we cant know how they feel about ...
^^
Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... many customers have voted. it means we cant know how they feel about the change. so...
^^^^
Line 5, column 420, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...nt know how they feel about the change. so what he says is just his assumption and...
^^
Line 9, column 55, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...so mentions the reporting by servers as a indicator what the customer thought abo...
^
Line 9, column 111, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
... the customer thought about the change. he says that many of customers who ask for...
^^
Line 9, column 161, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...at many of customers who ask for butter dont complain when they are given margarine ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 228, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... given margarine instead of the butter. if they recongnized the change, and felt h...
^^
Line 11, column 8, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...it can enhance his assertion. In the authors assertion, however, we cant know that, ...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 39, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... In the authors assertion, however, we cant know that, even he says that the custom...
^^^^
Line 11, column 87, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...w that, even he says that the customers cant distinguish butter from margarine. In t...
^^^^
Line 11, column 165, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
.... In this regard, a number of customers couldnt notice the change, and just ate their f...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 272, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... believing they were eating the butter. so it cant be supporting his assertion wel...
^^
Line 11, column 278, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ving they were eating the butter. so it cant be supporting his assertion well. ...
^^^^
Line 11, column 278, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...ving they were eating the butter. so it cant be supporting his assertion well. ...
^^^^
Line 15, column 2, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...e supporting his assertion well. he also assert that as the restaurant use ...
^^
Line 15, column 10, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'asserts'.
Suggestion: asserts
...ting his assertion well. he also assert that as the restaurant use margarine, t...
^^^^^^
Line 15, column 100, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...can save extra-money and make a profit. if the restaurant announce the change to a...
^^
Line 15, column 141, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...f the restaurant announce the change to all of the customers, and they accept it, it would...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 15, column 236, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
... good way for profit to the restaurant. but they use the margarine for just some pr...
^^^
Line 15, column 306, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
... just some profit, deceiving customers. they didnt make the price of the foods lower...
^^^^
Line 15, column 311, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... some profit, deceiving customers. they didnt make the price of the foods lower. so t...
^^^^^
Line 15, column 352, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...idnt make the price of the foods lower. so the authors assertion is not a right wa...
^^
Line 15, column 359, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ke the price of the foods lower. so the authors assertion is not a right way for the re...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 55.5748502994 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1452.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 298.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87248322148 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55877269182 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489932885906 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9077930643 57.8364921388 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.4210526316 119.503703932 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6842105263 23.324526521 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.68421052632 5.70786347227 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 5.25449101796 552% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189797856208 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627214281619 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436897088989 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111334318803 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040077112167 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 14.3799401198 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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