SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
The author makes an argument in favour of SuperCorp moving their headquartes from Middlesburg to Corporateville. The argument seems to be full-proof on the surface, but has a lot of implicit assumptions which need to be elaborated upon for the reader to concur with the final conclusion.
Firstly, the author assumes that the reason for a surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville implies that it is a superior place to live than Middlesburg. There might be other reasons for this unexplained occurence. For instance, maybe there was a sudden drop in prices of residential homes in Corporateville and many residents, being from a lower income strata, shifted to Middlesburg to save money on housing at the expense of lower living standards. Another plausible reason might be that, a lot of employees at SuperCorp who lived in Middlesburg caught wind of the company's decision to move to Coporateville and decided to shift early to get the best spots available.
The author also quotes an employee survey conducted at Corporateville. There is no evidence for the reader to believe the results of this survey. Maybe the survey was mostly taken by employees of a higher age demographic, who don't prefer the bustle of an urban area. The author needs to show that those who took the survey accurately represent the overall deomgraphics of the company as a whole. Also, there is no reason for us to believe that the survey's results will be the same as the actual opinion of the employees. Peer pressure and other work-related factors might have influenced a large proportion of employees to change their opinion for the survey.
Finally, the author states that lower taxes in Corporateville make it safer and cheaper than Middlesburg. The author incorrectly assumes that lower takes automatically make a place safer. The author needs to elaborate upon his reasons for making such an assumption. Also, it is an obstinate statement that taxes make a city cheaper. If the overall living expenses are higher in Corporateville than in Middlesburg, then the argument is reduced to being fallacious at best.
In conclusion, there are several loopholes in the argument presented. Unless the author gives proper explanations for his tacit assumptions, the reader can't confidently concur with the final conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK. This survey is only about workers where to live, not about where to work.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 378 350
No. of Characters: 1899 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.409 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.024 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.932 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.895 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.693 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.32 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...loyees of a higher age demographic, who dont prefer the bustle of an urban area. The...
^^^^
Line 9, column 153, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...s for his tacit assumptions, the reader cant confidently concur with the final concl...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, so, then, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 377.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15384615385 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02391921412 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503978779841 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.2510668923 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.263157895 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8421052632 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31578947368 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160577113146 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545727477491 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853611217084 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0882476018503 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802428705049 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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