Those who see their ideas through, regardless of doubts or criticism others may express, are the ones who tend to leave a lasting legacy.
There is a popular saying; "Winners never quit and quitters never win". This couldn't be more apt in the context of this issue. I firmly believe that only those who see their ideas through, despite doubts and criticism from others around them, are the one who tend to leave a lasting legacy. Most people generally criticize ideas which they think are utterly impossible to bring to fruition. However, history has shown us that only those who can push through, despite all the flak they recieve, are the ones who have truly changed the world. It takes a lot of courage, determination and self-confidence to keep striving towards a goal that everyone around you thinks is a foolish endeavor.
Steve Jobs, ex-CEO of Apple, had a very clear vision of his company since the begining. Since the earliest days of the company, evrybody from avid users to his own employees have always been imploring him to make the operating system more open-source and friendly to third party interference which would reduce operating costs of the company. However, he believed that having end-to-end control over the software by spending the extra money would ultimately benefit the user and improve the overall performance & security of his devices. He ultimately succeded and his legacy still stands today for everyone to witness. He made Apple into the giant multi-billion dollar coroporation we see today.
Another good example is Elon Musk. He initially made a fortune by selling his financial services company in the early 2000s. When he decided to invest most of his money into a new strat-up aimed at making electric vehicles which could compete with petrol-driven cars, everybody mocked him and went as far as saying "the worst investment anybody could ever make." However, slowly but steadily, his company, Tesla, started making progress and today is considered to be the premium electric vehicle brand in the world. His cars always have months of waiting time as soon as they are launched and performance-wise are comparable, and in some cases, even better than its petrol-driven counterparts. His company has brought about a paradigm shift in the industry and more people than ever before are enthusiastic about the future of electric vehicles than ever before. Had he not grinded through the intial tough years, never listening to all the doubters, the world today would be unimiginabaly different.
In conclusion, the courage to persist through the doubt, criticism and mockery from those around oneself is the hallmark of a visionary individual, capable of leaving a lasting impression on society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...quit and quitters never win'. This couldnt be more apt in the context of this issu...
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Message: Are you missing a verb?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, still, third, thus, in conclusion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2195.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18912529551 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73673436392 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60756501182 0.4932671777 123% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.7756594191 60.3974514979 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.944444444 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200420154332 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640153171337 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.151765947426 0.0758088955206 200% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144634209483 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.151699829315 0.0667264976115 227% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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