SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
Although the argument stated provides evidence to support its claims, there are indeed a couple of fallacies which need to be addressed.
The recent uprise in the number of residential owners in Corporateville actually poses a problem for the employees of SupeerCorp to set up their houses here, the reason being, there may be only a few houses left and most importantly, due to the increase in demand for residential areas, the prices of houses could skyrocket.
Secondly, we don't know how many employees were involved in the survey, moreover, where they lived while SuperCorps HQ was stationed in Middlesburg. It could be plausible that the survey would've been conducted only to a few employees, primarily the ones occupying the top levels. It is also not mentioned how many employees live in places other than Middlesburg who travel to work every day. Not having these facts, will lead to a survey result which is vague that can't really be trusted to the T.
And finally, a place having to pay lower taxes doesn't necessarily make it safe. It can actually be the other way around. Due to low taxes, security in Corporateville could be compromised. The lower taxes could also be a result of reduced amenities and insurance policies being made available. Important social benefits like healthcare may go overlooked which is never a good thing. This could have a negative impact on the employees.
To sum it up, the argument along with its evidence fails to emphasize a few key points stated above which invalidate SuperCorps decision to move from Middlesburg to Corporateville.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 267 350
No. of Characters: 1289 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.042 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.828 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.755 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 89 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 58 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.538 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.659 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.319 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.596 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.047 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 14, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...houses could skyrocket. Secondly, we dont know how many employees were involved i...
^^^^
Line 5, column 187, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: would've
.... It could be plausible that the survey wouldve been conducted only to a few employees,...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 465, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... to a survey result which is vague that cant really be trusted to the T. And fina...
^^^^
Line 7, column 48, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ally, a place having to pay lower taxes doesnt necessarily make it safe. It can actual...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, look, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1326.0 2260.96107784 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 264.0 441.139720559 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02272727273 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84153528452 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.468620217663 133% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 705.55239521 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.9697314102 57.8364921388 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13969405643 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407588659155 0.0743258471296 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462879676635 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0714791447167 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402486994663 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.