SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's current headquarters. Moreover, Middleburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument claims that the organisation supercorp moved it's headquarters from middlesburg to corporateville by assuming employees prefered to work from supercorp than middlesburg. stated this way the argument fails to explain several key factors on wich the conclusion of the argument is based. The conclusion of the argument relies on the assumptions for which there is not clear evidence. hence, the argument is weak, unconvincing and is flawed.
First, the argument readily assumes that there is a surge in number of homeowners in corporateville and hence claims that it is superior palce to live than middlesburg. this statement is a stretch and is not substantiated in any way. there could be many reasons for the surge in the number of homeowners in corporateville. For example, there is a real-estate boom in 2000 in Andhra Pradesh (ap) state of india and the reason for this surge is that there is a rumor about the proposed it Hub in that state. Though the place is not very superior to live than many other states in india, the real estate prices were more in ap when compared to other parts of the country. The argument would have been much more clearer if it explicity states that the living conditions of corporateville is better than middlesburg by providing evidences.
Second, the argument claims that corporatevile has lower taxes than middlesburg and hence a safer and cheaper place to work. this again is a very weak and unsupported claim as it is not properly substantiated with a proper evidence. there is enough evidence in claiming that lower the takes safer the work place. It would be much more clear and strengthened, if the author has provided more evidences for the correlation between lower taxes and saftey.
Finally, the argument is concluded by saying that the the organisation has made the best decision. "how did the author established the correlation between saftey and lower taxes in a particular region?", "how did he decide that surge in the number of homeowners has the relation with the living conditions of a place?". Without convincing answers to these questions, one is left with an impression that the argument is more of a wishful thinking rather than a substansive evidence.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above mentioned reasons. The argument could be strengthened by stating all the necessary factors. it is important to know all the contributing factors, in order to assess the merits of particular situation.
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Essay evaluation report
also need to argue:
Moreover, Middleburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 411 350
No. of Characters: 2023 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.503 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.922 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.89 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.615 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.634 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.652 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Stated
...o work from supercorp than middlesburg. stated this way the argument fails to explain ...
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Line 1, column 394, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Hence
... for which there is not clear evidence. hence, the argument is weak, unconvincing and...
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Line 3, column 170, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...uperior palce to live than middlesburg. this statement is a stretch and is not subst...
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Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...ch and is not substantiated in any way. there could be many reasons for the surge in ...
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Line 3, column 702, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'clearer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: clearer
...ntry. The argument would have been much more clearer if it explicity states that the living ...
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Line 5, column 126, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ence a safer and cheaper place to work. this again is a very weak and unsupported cl...
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Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...y substantiated with a proper evidence. there is enough evidence in claiming that low...
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Line 7, column 51, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...he argument is concluded by saying that the the organisation has made the best decision...
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Line 7, column 51, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...he argument is concluded by saying that the the organisation has made the best decision...
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Line 9, column 145, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...d by stating all the necessary factors. it is important to know all the contributi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, second, so, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 411.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10462287105 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02924886851 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45498783455 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8638433476 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.9 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.55 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197828125228 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582225239173 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0884088062642 0.0701772020484 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0959447449005 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761892085457 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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