The following argument was made in a newspaper editorial:
“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument claims that the autonomy of the country is based on the strength of its borders and if illegal immigrants entry is not checked then both the national economy and the identily are endangered. stated in this way, the argument fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion of the argument relis on the assumptions for which there is no clear evidence. Hence, the argument is weak, unconvincing and has several flaws.
First, the argument readily assumes that the autonomy of the country is based on the strength of its borders. this statement is a stretch and is not substantiated in any way. there are many other factors for the autonomy of the country. To illustrate, military intrusion is a common factor now a days. For a country like india, the neighboring countries' -- Pakistan and China -- military always try to intrude india's borders and interupt the integrity of the country. In addition, terrorism is also a major factor which disrupts the autonomous county and affects the country's economy, national identity and other major factors. The author could have been more clearer, if he explicitly stated that how autonomy is only based on the illegal immigrations.
Second, the argument claims that if the illegal immigrants are sent back to their origin country then the country's economy and national identity are not endangered. this again is a very waek and unsupported as the argument doesnot demostrate any correlation between how exactly illegal immigrants are problematic for the country's economy. The argument could add the following points to be strengthened by saying that the illegal immigrants are acting as the vote gerrymanders, possessing drugs, weapons and are acting as the anti-social elements whcih are a huge cost to the country's economic developement, as the country will fund a large portion of the economy for the public safety, which could be utilised otherwise.
Finally, the argument is concluded that if the illegal immgrants are sent back to their origin country then the country's autonomy is in safe hands and did not provide necessary evidence on how by doing this could enhance the nation's autonomy. Without answering the above metioned questions by provinding evidences or examples, the claim seems to be more of a wishful thinking rather than a substansive one.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above mentioned reasons. The argument can be further strengthed by provding are the contributing factors. In order to assess the merits of a certain situation/decision, it is better to have the full knowledge of all the contributing factors.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 433 350
No. of Characters: 2179 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.562 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.032 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.741 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 145 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.867 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.864 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.61 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'immigrants'' or 'immigrant's'?
Suggestion: immigrants'; immigrant's
... strength of its borders and if illegal immigrants entry is not checked then both the nati...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Stated
...conomy and the identily are endangered. stated in this way, the argument fails to ment...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...s based on the strength of its borders. this statement is a stretch and is not subst...
^^^^
Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...ch and is not substantiated in any way. there are many other factors for the autonomy...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 291, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
..., military intrusion is a common factor now a days. For a country like india, the neighbor...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 295, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...litary intrusion is a common factor now a days. For a country like india, the neighbor...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 656, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'clearer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: clearer
...jor factors. The author could have been more clearer, if he explicitly stated that how auton...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 166, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...d national identity are not endangered. this again is a very waek and unsupported as...
^^^^
Line 7, column 226, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
... on how by doing this could enhance the nations autonomy. Without answering the above m...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, second, so, then, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 432.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16666666667 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87430182687 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469907407407 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.6909110969 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.473684211 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7368421053 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31578947368 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354123539143 0.218282227539 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107353279122 0.0743258471296 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107685314603 0.0701772020484 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18940799135 0.128457276422 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0797868188145 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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