SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
The decision taken by Supercorp to shift its headquarters, although motivated by some clear factors such as lower taxes and rising home ownership, also makes the tacit assumption that the cost of relocation for its employees is not significant.
Firstly, Supercorp has not considered the ramifications of relocation on the employees' families. The employees' children may have a tough time adjusting to a new school in a new locality. Finding a suitable doctor can be quite difficult, among various other adjustments. Secondly, Supercorp has assumed Corporateville to be a suburban area. However, this may not be true. The rise in home ownership in Corporateville could also mean that people are buying more apartments in the downtown area rather than the suburbs, not necessarily making this new city a superior place to live.
With Corporateville having lower taxes than Middlesburg, the company must also consider the quality of life of its employees. It must be ensured that Corporateville has an uninterrupted power and water supply and a fast internet connection, among other amenities. Employees' must not have to make a significant sacrifice in the quality of their surroundings when relocating. Finally, the implication that having lower taxes leads to safer living conditions needs to be thoroughly verified. Lower taxes could, on one hand, mean that there would be less poverty, leading to less crimes. But it could also indicate an area ideal for other similar companies to relocate to. This could prove to be detrimental to Supercorp as its employees would be eyeing the other similar organizations to shift to, when the right opportunity arrives.
Notwithstanding the fact that Corporateville may be a cheaper and better place to live, Supercorp needs to consider a variety of factors before asserting that it has indeed made the best decision.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 296 350
No. of Characters: 1527 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.148 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.159 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.018 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.733 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.081 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.506 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 572, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun crimes is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...there would be less poverty, leading to less crimes. But it could also indicate an a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1575.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 296.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32094594595 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10240185647 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550675675676 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.7409085761 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7333333333 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184687852809 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631901239586 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624154994382 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125844065918 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0217336533074 0.0628817314937 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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